nilaffle: Thanks for the comments. I guess messing with eyes does have a tendency to get creepy. Like the Corinthian in the Sandman comics. *shudder* On this one I tried to do the line weight varation better.
Here's an inked version. I paid attention to darkening the lines away from the light source, placement of blacks, and using a series of short lines perpendicular to what would have been the main line. (Forehead wrinkles, for example.)