Anatomy: It appears as if you're using ovals to build the figures. It's a nice was to quickly get a silhuette, but there's more to anatomy than ovals. For example, the lower arm looks very different depending on how it pronates/ supinates (twists) because how the two arm bones crosses. One thing I remember being surprised about is how the fat part of the lower arm (when not bent) moves up to more to the joint. It rocked my oval construction world.
Shirow have a tendency to make really slim torsos, I can understand if you're going for that if you like his art (who doesn't?), but I think her hips look almost omitted (rightmost side). Could be the slight side angle and the leg pose, or maybe it's the oval construction's fault.
Nice faces was my first thought.
Light&color: Looks a bit flat, which is sort of okay with line art helping out. The dress, being made of cloth(?), should not go as high with the hilites (on the bewbs).
It's interesting to note how on photos of pinups, the values tend to vary a lot over the body. To render all the bodyparts with the same value range might flatten it. The hue and tan varies of course, but the genereral angle and distance from the light source is also important.
As for the background there's a texture mismatch that pulls her out of the scene. The skinshadow magenta indicates a blue sky enviroment, but the forest greens tells me there should be greens in her shadows.
Cindy Crawford illustrates arm joints, tanned legs vs pale lower arms (insides). Most importantly, note the ambient blue in the shadows, and the red gradiation on the edge to the shadow. Also note how the leftmost leg gets gradually darker near the bottom, cuz it's has another angle than the rightmost.
ed (links should be safe, if not, let me know): young cindy illustrates again. Purple hands, Brown legs, pale chest (also angled more up). No shading at all on her suit.
Okay maybe not supe relevant to your picture but still interesting to some I hope.
Last edited by Prometheus|ANJ; October 29th, 2004 at 01:07 AM.
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