I just finished this one today. It took about 6-7 hours in Photoshop.
I'm looking for people to really tear this one to shreds - I think it's a strong piece in some ways, but it covers a lot of ground that I'm really uncomfortable with, and it leaves a lot of my weaknesses just hanging out there. This is the perfect opportunity to identify & eradicate some artistic shortcomings.
Anything is helpful, I really want to understand why this piece doesn't look right.