Flowers (still life)

[Samuel Gray]

Hey, This is a painting im doin in corel essentials 2 for my grandma's birthday.

This is not done but this is about 1 hour of work.

comments and suggestions please.



second try at it.



third try at it.



fourth try at it.


what do you guys think?

[Samuel Gray]

Well this is what I have as my final right now.

I just need suggestions and comments.

[madster]

I once read that if you wanted to get really good at painting something, paint it 100 times. Just in the 5 tries you've done, you have made WONDERFUL improvements! Your lines are better, your shapes are better, your values are very improved.

The only thing I would add to your latest, is the cool "squiggles" you had in the first version's flower blossoms. The current flowers look kinda bland and undefined, which goes with the rest of the image, but a couple (don't overdo) of those squiggles would give the flowers just a little jazz...

Really nice composition, well done!

[Samuel Gray]

yea man ill never be satisfied lol. i will take that suggestion though and use it.

im soon ganna post it in finished area and around other sites but i just needed some more comments.

thanks

and might i add if you people like it better than the original by Georges Seurat?
http://www.ibiblio.org/wm/paint/auth...se-flowers.jpg

[Samuel Gray]

[Gridur]

Looks pretty damn nice, i like the way the colors make a nice atmosphere to it all, what i would like to see though is some details, especially on the flowers, maybe a focus point of some kind...

[Samuel Gray]

Yea ill try doing that, but its only like 2 hours of work total. I will continue to add to this piece though and add a strong focal point somewhere in the flowers to and make it brighter in that area.

[IceMoon]

I would ditch the vases dark countour line. And more defined shadows and highlights in the flowers.

[Samuel Gray]

The reason i had those there was because in the begining my lines were curved and distorted, but yes Im thinking of changing that also.

Thanks for the comments