Great stuff paperX! My two cents for critique is that if you trained your hand to make longer cleaner lines I think it would improve your work a lot.
Hope that helps.
sketcheth: thanks man, you give me waaaaaay too much credit lol...my line quality and anatomy is still as bad as ever i'm afraid
Max Challie: why yes it is
HunterKiller_: thanks dude!
nethus: thank you!
Hybrid_75: thanks for stopping by man, i definitely agree with you...hope to catch you at the workshop!
a la bapsi: lol, thanks heh i'm not that good at all...you can find people with better hatching etc like you said everywhere here on CA lets try to improve and work hard together!
mc2mc2: er...update? :p
destinyapocalypse: thanks man! i dont have a job yet though
YuZa: thanks so much for the crit man! it definitely helps! in fact i've been thinking about what you said for the past few days...will try to do some contour drawings such to work on this
Jeff Lai: hey man! glad to see you posting here too! definitely want to meet you in nov!
so um...yeah...sorry for the disappearance everyone...i wont make any excuses about uni or wtv...straight on to the update!
trying out with using markers...SP:
more pen doodle:
more more pen doodle ( i like this pen )
anime girl thing...(dont ask me why I suddenly felt like drawing something like this lol)
quite liked this one....plant bug monster thing:
went to the museum:
evil stuffed bunny from museum:
thumbnails for an art comp entry:
more thumb-nailing, slightly developed one:
made an artbook of sorts with some fellow ppl in my course for an anime doujin expo thing...my contribution: (front cover made from a teen challenge I did)
an drawing for the book (we could only afford black and white printing):
another: (kinda went too anime style just to appeal to the audience lol)
something I did on the last night before print for the book...might have gone too overboard with the look:
the back cover:
sketching: (the oldman is a study from the brilliant Arthur Rackham)
crappy random mind poop:
more poop: (her leg is bad....if you can even call that a leg ...)
fanart on the right for hunterkiller_'s character
Last edited by paperX; August 7th, 2008 at 10:06 AM.
sorry for double post...wanted to keep this separate....we started doing some storyboarding for uni so I thought I'd post them here for critique:
firstly we started off by doing one based on the music video for Karma Police by Radiohead (just happens to be one of my favourite songs )
Medium: Markers, ink pens, twink, and white pencil/charcoal.
PS: my teacher pretty much didn't teach us anything so I based these storyboards examples I found on google. (please point out any obvious errors you see!)
Next is one I made for a story concept (I had really limited time for this so I didn't think up much of a story...was trying to convey a mood more, I also wrote the comments and stuff on the physical copy to hand in...so this might not make much sense sorry...) I made a template based off a storyboard page I found from Miyazaki's Kiki's Delivery Service (please dont sue me guys! :'( )
Medium: photoshop, used reference.
Last edited by paperX; August 7th, 2008 at 09:56 AM.
LOL! a day in the life of allan huh? XD thats awesome...yet, you make it seem so depressing ....
i really like the shot near the end with the foot that comes in frame and then you walk off. very cinematic.
i'm looking forward to getting my copy of your book! nice nice drawings my friend. anime tards are indeed tard like =\
DRAWING IS COOOOOOOOL!!!!!
Good on you man, that's a colossal update after a long time.
I really like this one. The left leg on this guy is way too thin though, I'm sure it couldn't support him.
Nice V bottle on the second storyboard. My only crit on it is the fingers - they're all stiff. There's too much straightness, try to get a relaxed look, some fluidity. Think of each finger's individual sections, how they'll just fall and sit in their own comfortable space. It seems like the sort of drawing I end up with when I'm tense. If you're drawing tense, listen to some Daft Punk!
this is sick! your stuff is so good now! do you even know that!? MAJOR props. I need to go draw now, such a good kick in the ass. Many thankyous.
Love the BLAME! inspired stuff. Also, your form hatching and pencils are so solid now. So glad I checked in on you again!
OBX - drawing a.d.d.
The art of Joel Hladky
-Fear is the enemy of Imagination - Andrew Jones-
Hey Paper X,
Recognized your doujin cover. I was also selling with my friends at Doujin Overload. You made your doujin with Kouken right? I'll have to make sure to introduce myself next time.
btw those are really cool storyboards!
Last edited by Bone-Candy; September 12th, 2008 at 04:12 AM.
mc2mc2: heh thanks
derriere: omg you lucky person!!! i hate you
Kronos: lol ...dont get too excited about the artbook, its pretty bad
bhanu: thanks for the support man, will be sure to check out ur sb soon!
Max Challie: haha thanks man, yeah heaps of my sci-fi doodles are a bit form over function
OBX: hey man! thanks for stopping by, kinda weird people say that a lot about my stuff but i haven't even read blame! yet i checked out the Nihei's newer manga Abara though...it's like...totally my kinda stuff haha loved it to death
sketcheth: lol dude you need to stop asspatting and kick my ass instead although you already do with your art...
humanNature6115: thanks man!
Chris Noeth: hey dude! haven't seen you in a while....will make sure to check out your sb!
Bone-Candy: haha awesome, yeah i was being kinda reclusive at the event...didn't really talk to as many people as i should have see you around man!
I kinda have heaps of stuff here and there to update with....I guess I'll spread it out a bit this time...gotta dig up those school work files *sigh*
the sexy back is a study
working on abstracting the human shape down to more gesture and simple geometry, most of these were studies from a book, did the three down the bottom from a photo
drawing from photos and a random tentacle girl
couldn't finish this sketch due to time (was in a bookshop) but i loved the photo i was drawing from, so much movement
some really quick fingers
studies...used a nib tipped pen and my running-out-of-ink brush pen
quickly doodled 2 studies from the black frog's sketches (love his gestures, i really need to improve on that) I really like the girl in the right hand corner, think i might further develop the character (she kinda looks like jessica/yumiko )
concept for an animation im working on
messing around with colour...would really love some crits
I took some time to look at your sketchbook. It great to see that you put so much time and effort to get better and yes, you are getting better. I see tremendous improvement from the beginning to the end of your sketchbook. I think I could learn a great deal of your effort. I am a master of procrastination and I really want to break that habit. It was also nice to see you doing a lot of self portraits and even if you do one in five minutes I still can see it is you.
Keep up the great work and I want to see more so I'll be dropping by from time to time.
Very nice stuff! As far as critique goes the only thing I can say that I personally spot is a tad bit of work that needs to be done on perspective+proportion as far as references go.
I'm not that great though so I'm not sure if that's even helpful!
I like it all.
My sketchbook. ):
Finally an update.
The colour face is nice. Good colour choices. No critiques 'coz I suck at colour, as you already know.
Ah! We finally got another update!
Unfortunately I don't have any critique for you colour face either.. for obvious reasons.
I'm finally starting to see what you mean about that drawing you did of me.. it looked good early on. But I like the drawing you did of that middle aged man, with the beard etc. Looks sort of like the cover illustration for Metal Gear Solid 3.
Hey man, good to meet you in Wellington!
Those storyboards look like the best thing you've done so far, they turned out quite well. I think they could probably be a bit more bold, less sketchy and gradually built-up.
In general you seem to have kind of an inconsistent level of quality, some of your works are much better than others, I'm guessing the missing ingredient is *time*, either time per piece or time between pieces.
You also tend to rely heavily on building up your forms from sketchy rhythmic lines. This isn't such a bad approach sometimes, but it tends to flatten things, take away their volume. It also makes everything look a bit aimless, kind of flopping around. Its especially not helpful when applied to mechanical stuff...much more appropriate to monsters and stuff.
I would say work on being able to much more boldly lay down your lines, and when you do build things up from rhythmic lines, use that as an underlying sketch, then go in on top and clean up the lines, make sure that all the correct contours and overlapping are communicated effectively.
On the color face: needs more WORK...more layering of strokes and colors, more observation from life. In general you need to apply a more finished level of rendering and such...you've got lots of good ideas here, pieces where you started something but left it at the stage of sketch or an initial concept drawing...commit to producing some 'complete' pieces (just think...could this piece be used, as is, for production of a film, animation, game, whatever).
Lots of good imagination here, keep pushing it!
sketchbook...a kitten dies every time you don't comment
“When forced to work within a strict framework,
the imagination is taxed to its utmost – and will
produce its richest ideas. Given total freedom,
the work is likely to sprawl.”
- TS Eliot
Thanks guys...quick update, I'll do a bigger one soon with replies thanks for all the support!
A painting I've been working on (CRITS MUCH APPRECIATED):
Something I whipped up tonight, trying something new:
A music video I made for a school animation assignment, wasn't completely happy with it due to time constraints but check it out if you're interested I guess.
The song is 'Black Swan' by Thom Yorke:
Last edited by paperX; December 19th, 2008 at 08:47 AM.
Freakin cool animation dood.
haha you already know my crits for your tree piece but it still think it has too much contrast all around....focus it on ur focal areas...and don't use curves/colour balance too much...it kinda gives u that "overexposed" look...
Try to use to them only at the very beginning to give you a headstart or at the very end to balance things out.
Great to see an update and I'm looking forward to the next one
I like your animation, tells a good story and introduces me to new music that makes me want to draw.. was gonna critique your painting but I'll be back later, drawing now