hey, Lok... What an interesting work you are doing now. Sure feels like extremely creative process, no wonder you didn't analyze how it was born and it looks more like a magic or random to you. It's probably happening so fast... I wish I could see the singer pose and how you composed it with surroundings. Inner kitchen of the artist is my favorite place to hang out, not that i had an opportunity to do it often .
I'm happy for you. Hope you will get more commissions, it looks like you enjoy the process, despite that you said that something is not how you wish it.
It looks for me and maybe I'm wrong, that they want image of harmless, unpretentious, charming, personal, but not obnoxious, lighthearted, a bit strange, not totally understandable, sweet, mild mannered, but elegant guy, sort of space cadet. totally unpractical, but likable. A bit of out of this world... The one who feels the best in his own imaginative world, which looks like inner side of his own brains, complex maze of delicate tubes, paths and curves. Kind of philosopher..
Why I think that... if you want me to interpret what I see:
Suspenders and top hat: my associations with English gentleman, always neat and capable to be dressed for five minutes, meaning good, soft manners. Here goes unpretentiousness too, good taste, an opposite to vulgar. And his personal, simple, modest poses, when he sits or stands leaning to the wall, too simple and not demanding extra attention to him. Be he in crowd, he would l be not noticed.
He dressed accurately, so again, manners, taught with long years of discipline, and from here I think he is modest and sweet and mild mannered.
Unpractical: because there is no attribute of luxury and richness in the final illustration.
Original, not totally normal: bright orange suspenders and bright colors in the BG.
Personal: he looks straight into viewer eyes and all his poses, body language is open, not guarded, not pretentious, although not involving, just polite. Like he is open for contact, but not insist on it.
Weird, well it is his dress and surrounding and red eye in the illustration when he sits.
Not from our world: he is wandering like in some sort of maze which I interpret like his own brains or maybe his imaginative city, which in the end the same thing.
I think that's why they want simple sketches from you, your lines, because they're elegant. Light, a bit whimsical, like human thoughts should be and they have direction to somewhere, only we don't know where. they lead somewhere, but we don't see the final destination... space cadet he is.
That's what I think.
Together your collage creates delightful, light hearted, but potentially complex feeling. I don't know, it is a bit of a contradiction, but that's how I feel. Mild, simple manners and surroundings, but complicated and not immediately decoded. Sophisticated. An opposite to obtrusive.
So in your new sketches I imagine him flying in the sky maybe sitting on the huge flying bottle, not sure why it is the bottle though. flying eyeglasses John Lennon style, you know like little bicycle, a saucer with tea cup or some old fashioned object would be more appropriate for me . But it is just a guess. Or him sitting somewhere in the corner, not in the center of attention, observing politely... Maybe a bit tired.
I like your use of bright colors, it brings some chaotic element, as I said I See it like him wandering inside his own thought. So they are delightful, original, fresh and bright, a bit on the strange side. Spontaneous, that's why maybe they didn't want you to clean up the lines, they wanted spontaneous of the moment, maybe unpretentiousness.
My favorite sketches:
They are light, confident and elegant. Construction is strange and not recognisable as anything I know, but it has an order and harmony.
Can't tell which one of the illustration is the best. for me, they are pretty consistent, like one integrate story being told. Maybe the one where he is going up around grey tubes and the only bright thing is his suspenders... It is the most sophisticated one .