Good progress on the comic! Although I like to point out some things I noticed.
I just noticed that we're supposed to read this from right to left so correct me if I'm wrong.
Anyway, on to the crits:
Frame 1: I'm not sure what the purpose of this shot is. And what is the role of that bug? It doesn't appear anywhere else so you probably don't need to show it. Or maybe you could replace it with the main insect.
Frame 2: It would be great if you added the blue color to its patterns. So we know it's the same insect from the other frames.
Frame 3: My favorite shot. Great job with the perspective and the mood. I love the plants, too.
Although I would increase the contrast by making the light from the girl's room pop out more so we have a secondary focal point so we know where the insect is heading. Because you have other light values( ex: the highlight on the dome, the garage door on the lower left side, etc) that are competing with each other. Have us focus on the light from her room.
Frame 4: The door looks open from the inside rather from the outside like on frame 5.
Frame 5: Decide where the light source is coming from. Because the room is all bright. Is it from the big round lantern above her? If that is the light source you should have a warm color instead of making the room all bright. It could contrast well with the bluish tones of the moonlight. But again, decide where your light source is coming from.
Frame 6 and 7: Now it's confusing. Is she using the light from her cellphone to read? And the colors around her seem to be darker compared to the previous frames. So think about that as well.
Frame 8: In frame 5 her bed is right next to the wall behind her. Now it seems far away from it. And the light from the bug provides perfect opportunity for contrast. Make it pop out by darkening values around her. Also it would be better if the color of the bug's light isn't all white. Add some color to it like a warm color or something.
Frame 10: I'm not sure what's happening.
So from what I've noticed, there are problems with consistency and lighting. Decide where your lights are and use contrast in colors( warm vs cool).
Keep it up! I like what you're doing.