April 4th, 2005, 07:24 AM
On Her Way
Wow... I had no idea I could do something like this. I'm actually very suprised at the colors. Nevertheless, improvement has MUCH room in my arsenal of compositions. I recently messaged Ms. Loish (sorry, I don't know how to link. She's in my DevWatch) for some pointers and what I got out of it is sometimes you just gotta wing it. It seems like that's all some of you amazing artists out there do, and end up with amazing results to say the least.
Welpz, here's my lil Bengal/Creon/LeSean-inspired piece. Critiques are much welcomed/wanted/needed/appreciated. It's 4:33am Pacific....
April 4th, 2005, 07:44 PM
Know what you mean - happy accidents are the best kind, right?
I like this overall, but for me, the exaggerated foreshortening on her arms aren't working as well as it might. Especially the one behind her. It recedes so quickly, it just looks like she has a smaller right arm, rather than it's moving back into space. I think that's a result of her arms appearing to be held out at her sides, rather than one coming forward and one going back.
Re-examine the way the shoulders would look in both those positions. It likely would work better if her forward fist was overlapping her body (was more frontal and towards us), forcing her whole arm to be foreshortened, instead of just her forearm. The back hand too, isn't really reading as a hand - it looks sort of like a stump with one truncated digit on it. That's a tricky angle for the hand and it has to be absolutely right or it won't be convincing.
Keep working on doing things that are challenging for you though - it's the only way to get better! Cheers...
April 5th, 2005, 03:27 AM
Dood, thanks for pointing out how her arms' position is on her sides instead of overlapping. I totally missed it. Good eye, bro!