February 26th, 2012, 09:34 AM
A fictional cover for "Cyberabad days" by Ian mcDonald. (a very fine collection of stories about a near-future India, recommended read.)
This picture took me way too long, I got bogged down in details and lost the big picture. I'm calling it finished now, but I'd still love to hear any criticisms on how it could work better.
PS: -jpg compression seems to work like a 'sharpen' filter on this image.
February 26th, 2012, 04:20 PM
Wow, great work!
It's both beautiful and mystical.
February 27th, 2012, 06:15 PM
It's nice work and it shows you put a lot of effort in it.
It's really detailed, and IMO its a little too detailed. Maybe next time just put a lot of work to the part you want viewers attention, instead of losing their focus all over. A lot of things in the painting can use less detail to achieve a better effect. For example, those dimmed buildings in the back would've brought out more depth if you had left them as silhouette.
Also, the details in the background make me focus more on certain elements in the foreground that could use more work. Such as the curtains/fabric. They lack texture and is so much less detailed when compared to other things in the image.
I'm also a little confused about the depth and arrangements of buildings on the right hand side. The buildings on the left have a good contrast on light and shadows. But things on the right is just there. I'm guessing they are in the shadow of a larger building perhaps. But it's really hard to tell.
February 28th, 2012, 03:53 AM
Look: I think you're right on all accounts. I should have planned the composition in order to make more intelligent decisions about what part to detail and what part to leave in the background. I kept swapping and rearranging elements up until the end, which lead to 'too much detail and not enough focus'.
Thanks!, this type of criticism really helps a lot.
I did learn much from the process, so I hope it shows in the next one.
February 28th, 2012, 04:14 AM
Beautiful. The only (but quite big) concern is that you are not telling us what is most important on the image. There are some many sharp and detailed areas my eye finds it difficult to flow. Next time, try to render some areas more and other, less important, less. It will also help to determine depth, which is somewhat confusing in this image.
But still it is looking quite impressive. Cheer.
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