I'm still working on this piece but i was hoping to get some feedback so far. Im probably going to end up changing her face or expression, it's not really sitting well with me. Anyway thanks.
Her face and headdress are my favourite bits of this piece...
I will say that I didn't notice the eyes in her hair for the longest time. Perhaps make them more obvious by varying their tone with that of the hair?
Well, I stated that sort of inaccurately, my bad. At first I read them as glass beads rather than as eyes, because they're exactly the same colour palette as her hair, because they're oversized, and because the pupils are so dilated.
I like the narrative - if that's the right word - of the piece much better now that it's clicked.
Also please don't change the expression on her face! I agree, it's great as-is.
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The expression is fine, I agree. Very weird piece overall - in a cool and interesting way, that is. The hair swirls MOST wonderfully. Although I noticed the eyes pretty quickly, they really aren't reading as eyelike as they should...they're looking quite soft around the edges, so it might be nice to firm them up a little, and perhaps introduce some true highlights.
I really like the piece. I think theat it could use some more contrast or some true highlights. For me her body and face do not stand out too much, as the hair does.
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Love this piece, the hair, her face, its all good.
It's painted very well, i love those hands, good expression on the face as well. Not sure about the composition though. It's good that the swirl of the hair leads up to the faces, but i have this vague feeling that something needs to balance that whole mass on the lower part of the pic. I could just be talking out of my fundoshi mind you.
I disagree. I think the composition is one of this painting's many strong points.
Leave the face, I like it. Great piece, don't over cook it, start your next masterpiece! Love the light, color, eyes in the hair fantastic. Maybe a slight halo of light behind her head, sun/yellow, would help the space behind her not be so flat.
Really good job!
Thanks everyone for the feedback, it was very much appreciated. I was really expecting responses saying that her expression was off, but I guess i have just been staring at it too long. I'll clean the eyes up a bit more and a few other things and post it back up in the finished section. Thanks again.
This is very Cool ^_^ but why is she pointing out of the bottom right corner?
Well, her expression is certainly weird, but appropriately so. Like you said, you've probably just been looking at it too long. If I were you, I'd firm up the eyeballs, add some clearer highlights on them, and then call it quits! It's lookin' good.
Great job on the hands and the skin, and I love your colors. I do agree that a stronger light source would help the image a lot. The fabric on her dress also look less finished comparing to the beautifully painted skin and background.
Used some overlay layers to do a couple of quick paint-overs, with different lighting schemes. Where is the light coming from? What color is the light? Which direction is the light going?
This is shaping up to be a very strong image. Can't wait to see it finished
if you make the image smaller it kind of looks like the hair is an octopus coming to get the girl. I think the hair needs some more work, perhaps a bit of softness and some hightlights. The girl looks great but its hard to determine some of the shapes because the light values are so low. I think it needs some more highlights to determine where the eyes should look
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Just to address the lighting issue people are asking about: What I originally intended was for it to be a cloudy late afternoon . The light source is coming from behind her, dimly making its way through the clouds in the centre of the picture. I did consider a stronger light source shining through in the beginning, but I've done paintings of that sort before so I was trying to avoid it in favor of something different. I also wanted to avoid drowning out any of the details with too much light and lens flares and stuff, and with a stronger lightsource I figured I would have to darken the shaded side even more.
So in the end I settled with a cloudy afternoon with low light values, whilst trying to balance detail visibility with a recognizeable light source in the background. Also to give it a different kind of feel I wanted an overall greenish sort of tint to the whole thing to contrast with the red hair.
I'm pretty happy with how it ended up, but I agree that some adjustments can be made. Thank you all for the feedback, I really appreciate your help.
Heres an updated version. I hope the light source is a little more readable now. I may call this one finished. I've been working on it for a while now and theres only so much I can do for so long before my nose starts bleeding and I fall to the floor . Any additional feedback would be great.
YES on flipping the image - bravo!
Truly amazing!!! Although I think the eyes get lost a little...
This is really gorgeous, and I think you'd be completely justified in calling it done. My only suggestion would be to maybe try tinting the eyes greenish, if you want them to stand out from the hair a bit more.
Looking at your portfolio, I really like all of your concepts and compositions, but in many cases the lighting and rendering isn't quite as perfectly polished as this piece is. I don't mean to be hyper-critical, but since it seems like you're looking for work, you might spend a bit of time refining some of those older pieces. A portfolio is only as strong as its weakest image... and since I really like your stuff, I'd love to see you get paid to do more of it.
It's just a small thing, but for me the central bulk of the hair has too much, well, bulk. It's so dark it reads as extremely thick and heavy and as such shouldn't have so much movement in it, it should be weighing her down more. I think if you let a teeny bit of light filter through especially in that lower middle section it will make a big difference.
Hope that is helpful in some way.