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June 3rd, 2007 #1
A distant city...Need some help!!
Hiya CA.org, I'm in need of your help again.
I was wondering what you guys thought of this, what the mood is
like for you guys/gals.
For me its too busy, but I cant seem to make it anymore peaceful.
Any critiques or comments would be much appreciated.
And heres another one just for fun.
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The second one looks very peaceful to me. The first one, because of the green sky, has a sort of polluted and foreboding feeling in my mind.
They look like pretty quick impressionistic renders, but I'd suggest firming up the lines of the distant city to make it look a bit more structure-like.
June 3rd, 2007 #4
keep in mind some elements of atmospheric (aerial) perspective.
greater textures should be visible in the foreground, shapes should be less defiend as they receed in space. closer to the horizon you'll be looking through more atmosphere, so the sky is more 'white' near ther horizon. you've got the idea of less saturated hues in the distance, but typically they lean towards a blue color in most conditions, they should "gray out and blue" as they get further back.
the dirt road int he first pic coul duse greater contrast and texture to imply it being mor eprominent as the foreground.
anyway, i'm sure this is all stuff you already know. strong use of color to establish mood.
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yeah I think your peaceful intentions are surfacing pretty damn good. I like both of them but I agree that the first one is SchwEEt. I love paintings that make you want to jump into them and walk down some mysterious path. Very inspiring work.
June 3rd, 2007 #6
the first one makes me want to play Shadow of the Colossus some more!! whooo.
but I agree with Yulorian, the green (I'd call it the grey cloud) in the sky is what makes that scene look less peaceful. the twiggy trees all look kind of dead, too, so even though the grass is lush, there's a kind of deathy feeling involved.
June 4th, 2007 #7
Ah, sorry for the late reply folks, I couldn't get on the computer.
Zimzibar: Hehe, I didn't know people would like the dirt path so much, thank you!
Yulorian: Yeah, when i look at it again it looks very dead, and eerie.
I added some more twigs and tree to make it more lively, but still with a creepy sense. (hopefully)
I also built up the city like you said, not much though, since I wanted to keep a
kinda mystery to what it actually is.(feel free to mention if its not working)
Grief: Yea, I have an idea on some of that stuff but I'm never certain..
I'm only 16, I've still so much to learn. I guess I just need to study more.
Do you know of place where I can find references for places like this?
With big sweeping hills and stuff, like Ireland or something?
Zhimson: Wow, never thought I'd inspire anyone, you've made my day.
Xazy: Heh, never played Shadow of the Colossus.And yes, I also agree that it makes it sickly feeling, but I kinda like it, even though it wasn't what i was going for.
Here's the revised version, I added the tree, blocked in the town a little more,
added more texture and stuff to the foreground path, fiddled some more with the water.
And probably some more stuff that I forgot.
Thanks, for the comments guys! Any more are always welcome.
June 4th, 2007 #8
Lovely, that tree its great i think the dark greay cloud on the left really adds a sense of foreboding now though, so i'm not sure if you're still going for peaceful but i think you're moving away from it. i actually like it like this though, it's so mysterious, and i still wanna follow that path! The foreground is still a bit plain to me, i was thinking as it's quite dark at the front, maybe you could add more trees, as if we're coming out of a forest and going down that path pver the hills towards the city? or a fence or something? Just throwing some ideas your way, you don't have to use them
June 4th, 2007 #9
Wow, thanks so much Zim.
This painting is so much better now, in my eyes anyways.
I added the fence like you said cause, it's a good idea, and I like fences. I also added some more shrubbery.
Ooh, I almost forgot, heres another something from last night.
June 4th, 2007 #10
Ooh it's lookin good now! That fence helps to lead your eye even more to the centre of the image, then i'm pulled towards the bright haze and the city The shrubbery helps with the illusion of distance too, more detail in the foreground etc.
The bottom one's nice too, you lay down good moods, and lighting, with your sketches i think, something i've never really been able to do. Great pics so far, can't wait to see more! Do you have a sketchbook? I'm gonna start one tonight/tomorrow - it'd be good to see you starting one too if you haven't already
June 4th, 2007 #11
Oh, and i love how the fence is broken where the water goes through it - it makes it look old, as thought the stream eventually wore through that part of the hills and took down the old fence with it
June 4th, 2007 #12
Again, thanks for all the help.
Sadly no I don't have a sketchbook, although I think it's what I've been needing... I think I will start one!
It'll force me to draw more applicable stuff I think, and more variety, I feel like i draw the same thing over and over again...
Anyways.. Good luck with your sketchbook!
June 4th, 2007 #13