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    PLZ i need feedback!!! (urban design graduation assignment)

    Hello everybody,

    this image is a presentational illustration for my graduation of urban design. i would love to get some feeback about: composition, colors, readability, anything you think could be better. thanks!!!

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    I like it but the only thing that is bothering me is the rectangle you have in the middle that is surrounding the trees.

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    thanks, hehe, its part of the design, after that rectangle, it has a slight angle to the ground plane, so people can walk up there. but i'll remove those lines its confusing, obviously. it seems like as the longer you work on a certain project/design, the less eye you have for "the obvious" so thank you. any other crits people?????

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    Might be my interpretation, but with all the smoothed out colors (engrish?) there seems to be some suggestion of speed. I think making the pic a bit easier on the eye would do well. I think centering it would also help. The people lying down in the left corner might be a bit too big.
    Nice inventive design. Not quite sure if this was helpful, good luck on your project.

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    update

    changed some things, removed the rectangle. i like the composition, didnt change anything about that. also i like the flashybrush thing. because the form of the design, in top view, is lightning, its kinda reference to that i think. also i changed the colors a bit.

    plz tell me what you think

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    I love it!

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    It's definetly better now. I like the colours. Also with the strange rectangle gone shapes make more sense now.

    Nice job!

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    The second one is much better, but I think it looks a little too sketch-y — your green smudges down into the building, and it's not clear (because you go over the same lines again and again) whether the right- and leftmost corners of the park are meant to be peaks in the building. Clean up the building itself and it'll be more apparent I think.

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    infinite monkey, i think i know what u mean and i agree. i cleaned some stuff up, i think its better now.

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