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    Please Critique

    Hello all,

    I recently had this illustration published. It's my first time nationally published, and I was just wondering what sort of feedback might be out there. My own critique of the piece has this:

    1) Push the contrast....really, really, push my contrast more.
    2) Nail anatomy next time. I'm not so happy with the extended arm.
    3) Better scanning/photography of the original.

    Other thoughts??

    My thanks to anyone who offers advice.

    Sincerely,

    K.I.D.

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    His (her?) right knee sticks out at angle that doesn't seem to make much sense, the thigh on the same leg also appears out of perspective.

    Congrats on getting published. (:

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    The angle on the front of the face seems too flat and strange to me. I think a little bit of the nose should be showing.

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    bump the contrast on the foreground(trees and kid). maybe also use ref next time for the tree branches and texture. unless you can pull it out of your head.

    the kids pose is also kinda wierd. the arm holding on to the tree, the treebranch he's holding on to, and his head all seem to overlap in a flat fashion.

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    hey K.I.D. nice to see you posting.

    i think you have to make sure that you know what you want to achieve with that illustration. do you want a realistic/illustrative shading? do you want to have a fully developed contrast range? what kind of stroke do you want? i think it is important to not mix up different styles/ if you decide to use a flat shading f.e. , stick to it.

    about the image: i like how you guide the eye to the figure / some round forms would help (right now all the elements of the picture are relatively stiff and straight.)
    for me it remains unclear what exactly is shown in the lower right corner.

    as you said already, i think you should work on your anatomy.

    if you want to push your contrast, you have to think about light and shade more seriously. right now the drawing has no clearly definable lightsource. for a very illustrative feel that is ok, but if you want to move on, practice light and shade. practice your stroke.

    the lines on top of the image are a nice idea, but i don't think they fit well into the image as it is right now.

    keep working, study hard.
    all the best, sascha

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    Hey, thanks guys! I really appreciate crits. The story is titled "Spider Comes Home". It is about a young African boy who meets Spider, a mythical creature...the equivalent of American Indian's coyote. They have a contest throwing "story fruit" at each other. Doesn't make much sense when I relate it, but the story is really good and well written.

    Once again, I really appreciate everyone's crits. They are a huge help.

    Have a good week guys!

    K.I.D.

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    it seeems like everything else is forshortened exept forthe figure and the branch that its haning from. it woud be interesting to see that branch for shortened, likewise with the figure. very good imagination though keep up the good work1

    fuck it, Im going in
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