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this is my first post ever in ConceptArt so please be gentle!! (actually please crit as much as you can because is the only way for me to learn!)
This is a piece from a personal project about the circle of life, I'm really happy about the result but I'm pretty sure you will show me there's plenty of areas to improve. (looking forward to!)
A little about me. I'm a sushi delivery driver living in London trying to break into the bussines, any help would mean the world for me.
take care and keep drawing!!
Haha, that's great! Good luck with your career, man!
cool.. i like the 'expression' of surprise and anger of these two dinos. that raptors gonna get his ass handed to him - JAG
it's only after you've lost everything, that you're free to do anything..
In the Western culture, the eye tends to read left-to-right not top-to-bottom, so the natural progression is to look from the closed eye to the T-rex attacking, then at the open eye and reaction shot. Some people call that sort of thing a rule, but I think of it more of a guideline and ignore it when I can make it work.
You try pretty damn hard at making it work -- the raptor looking up at the T-rex in the final panel, for example, but the energy and action in that final panel draws the eye too much. The page shape is odd for comics, too, since they're traditionally portrait format, not landscape.
You should do a little research on atmospheric perspective: essentially it's the level of detail and contrast grows the closer something is to the viewer. You also should try to control your contrasts a little better - -the details on the raptor get lost in the shadows --and the raptor itself is nearly lost in the third panel.
Good work --keep it up!
Last edited by rpace; April 23rd, 2007 at 03:41 PM. Reason: image attachment
@faust: thanks!, This is something I was really looking foward to, showing my work to people who's passionate about the same things.
@JAG: thanks, I'll post the original story so you'll see what happens to the raptor!
Richard: You have no idea how much I value the input, you are absolutely right on what you mention, I was conscious about the way the eye tends to read (left to right) but I had a 12.5 x 10.3 format to deal with, (this was for a special contest Dark Horse was doing but I couldn't make the deadline).
Here are the ORIGINAL pages, (This is page 6 out of 8.), It is really old and B/W so that's why I decided to give it a go on color (and line) now that I feel I have evolved a lot since back then.
the correction you made on the page is great!, it reads so easily! you can be sure I'll keep an eye on my atmospheric perspective.
Thanks a lot!!
Last edited by danlop; May 15th, 2007 at 06:19 AM.
This was done about 2 or 3 years ago, way too old, the inks are a mess and the text sucks, the only good thing going for it is the story telling (at least I like it) the story is simple and works so that is way I'm doing it again, It will be cool to see the progress in these years.
I think it looks awesome, I love dinosaurs! But aren't the eggs a little too small for being T-rex eggs?
Life is a promise
Thanks for sharing the whole thing. I'd like to see what you'd do with pen & ink all this time later.
@Kaya-: Hi Kaya!, I love dinos as well, have a look at: http://danlop77.cgsociety.org/gallery/ and you'll see some more of mine.
The eggs are from the raptor!, it is supposed to be nesting them!! aawh man that one hurt! hahaa
@Hazart: Thanks mate, I'll sure keep them coming.
@rpace: Hi Richard, the truth is, it has been a while since I stop doing inks on my drawings, I've been trying to avoid the hard black line on my works to get better at coloring and forcing myself to define volumes that way instead of with a line.
This is one of the last pieces I inked last year, it was just for fun, first pencils, inks by hand, scanner and then colors in Photoshop.
By the way, I saw your work and it is awesome!