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    Critique of my Opera Singing Octopus Man

    I would have put this in finished, however, and despite the fact that I probably won't fix this image since I can't well... find it anymore..., I just wanted to get some feedback about this guy.



    I already know a few of things like that his arms look a bit too stiff, and that his torso is a bit long but I was wondering if there are a few other noteworthy things to point out...

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    Fear not, for I am with thee.

    Arms are stiff, the hands are off too. The anatomy needs work but is still pretty good. Also, I'm not sure that straight white light reflects off of skin that way, tone it down. Add some highlights to the hair too.

    Weird and cool. Keep it up.

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    I do happen to draw girly men... sorry if you don't approve.

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    Quote Originally Posted by FuzzySocks
    I do happen to draw girly men... sorry if you don't approve.
    LOL! There is nothing wrong with a man in touch with his feminine side. However, some hint of masculinity in his face is needed. When men have muscles like that, they also have lots of testosterone, and lots of testosterone causes all of the body to be more heavily muscled, including the face and neck, and it causes the development of other masculine features, such as the adam's apple, wide jaw, heavy brow, and facial hair.

    In other words, a girly head only looks correct on a girly body.

    Great image, otherwise.

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    I don't know why, but his overly large belly button disturbs me more than his girlish features.

    The shoulders have some funny muscle issues. His deltoids have some kind of extra mini-muscles at the insertion. They should just run smoothly into the side of the arm. Also, they seem to be sitting on top of the pecs, while they should actually sit under. Also, his abs are huge HUGE huge in proportion to his torso. The whole torso musculature needs more study.

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    your arms need some work as well the contour of the bicep perfectly match the contour of the tricep creating the sausage effect i'd reference some anatomy books or reference yourself in the mirror. I really like it overall i'd like to see the progression on this peice.

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    values!
    it seems you applied a colour wash over a pencil drawing withour darkering/lightening any aspect of the figure/tentacles.
    The highlights could use some work.
    interesting image though

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    I love the tentacles. One thing the others didn't mention, and maybe its because I'm incorrect, but it wasn't the feminine aspect of the face that I saw as off so much as that the alignment of the nose, mouth and chin. If you draw the basic understructure of the skull and such it actually seems as if the nose angles to the right of his chin and the mouth sort of angles oddly in between.

    Someone else verify or deny what I am seeing.....I've not yet had my morning coffee. Otherwise I agree with most of the statements already made. With 'Opera singing' in the title though I kind thought I'd see a more dramatic arm pose and wide open mouth belting out an aria....he seems slightly passive and not so dramatic in gesture....though in form, the horns and tentacles are rockin.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Seedling
    LOL! There is nothing wrong with a man in touch with his feminine side. However, some hint of masculinity in his face is needed. When men have muscles like that, they also have lots of testosterone, and lots of testosterone causes all of the body to be more heavily muscled, including the face and neck, and it causes the development of other masculine features, such as the adam's apple, wide jaw, heavy brow, and facial hair.

    In other words, a girly head only looks correct on a girly body.

    Great image, otherwise.

    I agree with the musculature in the jaw area... which I fail at! XD But that's why I'm here! So huzzah!

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    Arms

    Quote Originally Posted by ashrumm
    your arms need some work as well the contour of the bicep perfectly match the contour of the tricep creating the sausage effect i'd reference some anatomy books or reference yourself in the mirror. I really like it overall i'd like to see the progression on this peice.
    I agree... I have a couple anatomy books, but I think I need some better ones! Or I just don't reference them enough... but shoulders + arms are the hardest parts for me to draw... MUST.... IMPROVE!

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    highlights

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    it seems you applied a colour wash over a pencil drawing withour darkering/lightening any aspect of the figure/tentacles.
    The highlights could use some work.
    interesting image though

    To be perfectly honest I did just slap on the highlights. But I will defenitly take that into consideration next time.

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    Quote Originally Posted by DavePalumbo
    I don't know why, but his overly large belly button disturbs me more than his girlish features.

    The shoulders have some funny muscle issues. His deltoids have some kind of extra mini-muscles at the insertion. They should just run smoothly into the side of the arm. Also, they seem to be sitting on top of the pecs, while they should actually sit under. Also, his abs are huge HUGE huge in proportion to his torso. The whole torso musculature needs more study.

    I love the suckers on the tentacles

    I think I just need a better understanding of muscles PERIOD... at least you like the suckers... that makes me happy!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Kahl
    I love the tentacles. One thing the others didn't mention, and maybe its because I'm incorrect, but it wasn't the feminine aspect of the face that I saw as off so much as that the alignment of the nose, mouth and chin. If you draw the basic understructure of the skull and such it actually seems as if the nose angles to the right of his chin and the mouth sort of angles oddly in between.

    Someone else verify or deny what I am seeing.....I've not yet had my morning coffee. Otherwise I agree with most of the statements already made. With 'Opera singing' in the title though I kind thought I'd see a more dramatic arm pose and wide open mouth belting out an aria....he seems slightly passive and not so dramatic in gesture....though in form, the horns and tentacles are rockin.

    Your right, now that I look at the alignment of the face something is a bit off, I also think it's partially due to how I angled the upper lip... the chin needs to be rotated to the left a bit... and then I think it would look alot better. As for the Opera bit, I should have made a more dramatic pose, but I was mostly thinking of the story behind it rather than making it come through in the picture which was also bad on my part!

    Thanks for the tips though!

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