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    reaching for the skies

    hi all...

    this is a piece i started some time ago (like 2 weeks) as a birthday present for my mother. since then im noodling around on it (changed clouds and the rock about 5 times yet) and finally think its in the right direction.

    please hit me hard with crits and input. thank you.

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    the clouds have good volume and the whole BG speaks of a particular time of day & quality of light, but none of it is interacting with the emerging form, so it all seems disconnected.

    the emerging-from-stone metaphor seems more apprporiate for a sculptor -- with that wealth of color in the setting, i think a painter emerging from or being constructed by the light would be something to consider as well.

    technical crit -- the star is way too large and too bright for this time of day -- usually they barely start to be seen when the sky reaches this point, and are often lost in the glare from clouds, etc. not saying remove it, perhaps just make it much more subtle, i think it'd still be discovered by a viewer.

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    Quote Originally Posted by masque
    ...the star is way too large and too bright for this time of day...
    Not if it's the Death Star!

    Seriously though. The Bg is nice, but like masque said,you need to get some of that light hitting the rock. Bright and warm around the head and shoulders, and then fade out to cooler colors with less contrast at the bottom.

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    i don't mind the star so much, i think it's cool! but, i agree it could be distracting. i'd give the clouds a more random feel, they seem really uniform so far, but i'm diggin the colors. i think you are going in the right directions, and you can really load up that stone dude with color.
    i'd put some crumbled rocks/debris around, and vary up the shapes in the rock,
    maybe u could get some interesting diagonals if you painted in waves crashing in or coming up.

    oh, i'd raise the clouds on the right side a bit, they're kinda on the same level as the top of the head.

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    thank you alot guys. great input.

    i didnt touch the figure yet really ... especially if it comes to bg integration... im not sure yet what i want for the bg .

    so i started over again. better or worse what do you think?

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    first clouds & star are much more interesting. now he looks trapped rather than emerging, imo.

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    yea, go bak to the orange man, those clouds were more interesting.
    granted it doesn't compete with ur figure as much, i still like the old one better.

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    Personally, I’m liking the new clouds better. Although you’ve lost some colour in your art you’ve created a better atmosphere. It almost feels easier to breath, and he’s a lot higher than the clouds now rather than at the same height (giving your title a more emphasis). Nice detail on the rocks.

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    I like what you did with the overall colour. Befroe the grey stone was cold and receding like hell, but now the bg and fg seem to be on equal ground.

    Get some yellow light cookin' like it's been said and I think you're on your way.

    What's weird is the somewhat disjointed feeling I get when trying to spy the focal point, it's a virtual tug of war between the face and the pallette... to me at least

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    Ever been on top of mountain and watch the sunrise or set? The thought was this the son of mother nature emerging to paint a glorious sunrise to clear mother nature's dark mood. The figure's base is jagged rock rising to a smooth bashful look of what he has done for his mother.

    I really like your idea please finish it and cast the orginial cloud colors his shoulders reflecting down.

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    nice bg!! but yeah needs more radiosity from the sunlight. Looks like an evening scene, but the lighting on the statue does not reflect that.

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