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    Hi,


    I would like to get some feedback about a piece i made with a wacom tablet... I'm still trying to get 100% comfy with it.




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    1.first of all where is the glare from the lava on the human and the beast.
    2.If you create some of the splashes infront of the two characters, then they will look to be more in the centre of the lava.
    3. I think you've been a bit lazy with the lava. spend a bit more time on it.
    4. lose some of the outlines and rough marks.

    i'm no expert but those are my opinions. It would be helpful if you could provide a bit more info next.


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    Jason hit the nail on the head. Your characters are not immesed into the background. The lava, in effect, should splash all around them, not just behind them. In addition, i would disagree with jason about the lines. I would instead revise the statement to say whatever style you choose for the piece needs to hold consistant. Your characters are comic style-ish with bloack boarders and outlines, while your lava, rocks, smoke, basically everything else, is not. In effect you are drawing with two different styles.

    Pick one. personally i like the line work, but you can go either way. My last compain is the expression on your business-man; he seems to be yelling as angrily and intentively as your demon. Are they fighting? It seems the overall picture dictates he is falling victim to this demon, so his facial expression needs to reflect this.

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    Thanks for your comments guys. I will follow your pointers to modify some aspects of the piece.

    I was specially surprised about the man's face problem. You are totally right: it looks as angry as the demon's one!
    I guess I never realized of this because the file I was working on had a much higher definition; the resizing of the picture gave it this weird effect.

    I will work on it.

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    Ok, this is what i got so far.

    I have modified the face of the man to make it more obvious he's scared and not angry. Also, I placed some lava in front of the demon as Jason suggested to make it fit more in the enviroment.

    The lava issue it's a tricky one... i outlined it first trying to match it with the figures, only to find out it didn't look hot and glowy anymore. I didnt want it to give the impression the demon was coming out of a tomato soup bowl, so I took most of them out, leaving some traces here and there.

    Also, I gave the whole picture a more redish glow...




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    hi,
    i would try to overwork the background. you have draw a red and white flame. maybe a orange and dark-red flame look better?!?

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    check neck anatomy.
    signature in white is distracting because of values. change/takeout, don't use white.

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    Hola, genial el logotipo eh?
    La idea esta bien, aparte de lo que te han dicho ya, yo iluminaria mas al pobre ejecutivo (la lava es un foco de luz ascendente amarillenta o anaranjada) en mi opinion las luces del tio estan poco definidas.
    Intenta no repetir la misma forma tanto en el humo de atras como en los chorros de lava de abajo, eso creo que le quita realismo.
    y no se tal vez aumentaria el contraste del demonio para darle mas dramatismo (luz desde abajo).
    claro que eso es mi opinion personal.
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