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January 10th, 2007 #1
UPDATE - SUPERCHARGER, 3 pages of hot comic art
I'm working on a project called SUPERCHARGER . I'm writing it and doing all the art, and it encapsulates a lot of things I love and that I have wanted to do for a very long time. It merges cool movies from the 60s70s like Bring me the head of Alfredo Garcia, Vanishing Point, the Getaway, and some cool modern settings with a lot of Car Culture thrown in. Basically it's Grand Theft Auto meets Hellboy, as if directed by Sam Peckinpah
I'm planning to do a submission very soon but I have not choosen the publishers just now. It's planned as a 3 issues miniseries, with self-contained stories spanning a larger story arc.
Have a look at the first 2 pages, try to read if you can make out the text and give me your opinion!
Page 3 at the bottom of this page, down there.
Last edited by black_fish; January 16th, 2007 at 06:17 AM.
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well I dont know about anyone else but I like it! great coloring and nice work on the cars. Love the style and panel work. I'd buy it!
Some crits if I may, some of the line work, like on the street, is a little sloppy, you got wiggly lines here and there. Im not too sure I like the blur on the lower first panel. That takes it more into realism than comic line art- I mean it looses the line work-but thats just IMO.
the last panel lost the movement, it lacks the action. I can see theres a crash but the feeling is just not there.The explosion is weak and the action lines are vague...again, IMO.
great job tho
"Be who you are and say what you feel,because those that mind don't matter and those that matter don't mind."-Dr. Seuss
January 10th, 2007 #3
I agree, the crash is missing something. The cars themselves look as if they are stationary, which is in part due to the wheels. You can see the detail on them clearly, wheras they have some form of blurring on the main car in the panels above.
January 10th, 2007 #4
How wonderful it is to find out that there is an artist who is doing the exactly the same thing that I do right now. Maybe we should exchange one copy when we are done!
Love your work! If you could improve on those details that are mentioned up there, and be consistant with it, I think you will be fine.
I'm more than certain that you will be proud of yourself to even finish the project.
Because we all know how many people attempt to finish their comics and hopelessly fail.
May the force be with you, soldier!!
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I love the style and artwork, and the colors too... I also agree with what has been said, but I have one question:
why is there a girl on one of the panels, as if she's riding on the passenger seat, but she does not appear on the other ones? and the guy even tells her to hang on, is this done on purpose? is there a story behind it?
January 11th, 2007 #6
Okay. I'm hoping I'm not out of line here. Your art is amazing. I have no crits, but your continuity felt a little off in places and I did a rework. moving some things around. Please forgive me for my crude cut-and-paste.
First - and this is funny coming from a writer - I think you could get rid of some text. The pictures tell the story.
Here's what I did...
1st panel. Got rid of some text. You can introduce him later.
2nd Panel. Got rid of the text. You don't need to tell what you're showing.
3rd - 5th panel. Added sound and speed lines to better show the cars coming up fast.
Changed the order of the middle three panels. Changed the text of the thumb panel. Added a sound effect.
6th Panel. Got rid of some text. Moved some text.
I also think the sound effects in the 6th panel should be opaque instead of transparent. They don't read clearly enough as is.
As to the girl. I'm wondering if she's a ghost. If that's the case, maybe we should see her empty seat in the rear view mirror in the last panel on page one.
January 11th, 2007 #7
Thanks for your comments all, and your hard work.
Yes the girl is more or less a ghost
Inking is a bit shaky, it's not my strong point, but on the other hand I don't want it to look like it was done in Illustrator.
Thanks for the advices.
January 11th, 2007 #8
Oh Yes!! ...u cant go wrong when u are using the ultimate car, ever, in yr comic... -a 1970 Dodge Challenger!!! (or is it a -71? there is a hint of a split grill....).
Keep up the good work and post more of this bad boy when u can!
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January 11th, 2007 #10
I like it... it is different to most other comic stuff and has a good 'mix'.
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January 11th, 2007 #12
I absoloutly love this style!
January 11th, 2007 #13
One thing I forgot to say, relevant or not, is that I'm using the captions here in kinda old school style (between stan lee and frank miller), basically describing what's already in the panels to heighten it and give it a bit of cheesiness. The idea is to replicate that 70s movie style, where everything is over the top, lyrical, too much BUT always sincere. Not sure I managed to do that but that's the idea. I hate those comics that are all images and no words anyway; comics are the meeting point between images and words.
Don't really like to explain what I want to do but this time I wanted to make that point.