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Need crits badly on this one
Last edited by miljenko; December 30th, 2006 at 10:05 AM. Reason: improved values and added more detail
If this is a color comp its a very good start. If its supposed to be finished I would say you really need to render out the detailes much tighter. Compositionally it has a few problems... 1. the soldiers in the bg are not connected to the foreground at all (maybe continue the wall to the left), 2. the red smoke fights with the main character imo.
Otherwise you are off and running - great job!
There are some nice elements to this. The color works well, as do the value transitions on the horse and armor. However, there are some anatomy issues with both the horse and rider. The first thing that came to mind at first glance was that the horse looked a bit like a Llama, given the length of its neck and size of its head. Horses never really hold their heads straight up like that either. Not unless someone's yanking at the reigns. The legs of the rider, particularly the thighs, don't seem right to me either. Aside from these issues, the short cuts you took with the background environment really keep this from having a finished feel to it and really ought to be worked back into. I hope that helps. Keep at it.
Originally Posted by se7en_
Se7en: Thanks alot on your remarks! Well, I guess I sorta had that Craig Mullins loose style in mind, so wanted to kind of emulate impasto strokes...I dunno. What I definitely wanted to do is to leary demarkate background with the character in the foreground, him, his horse and the flag. Thats why the background is very loose. But, if you think the foreground needs more details, I don't disagree.
ND Hill: What you said about the horse thing kind of worries me more about this painting, since it is a bit Llama like. I guess I wanted to give to the horse an earnest battle hardened look. Half-way through the picture, I felt that it would have been better if the horse was bucking or something, like in the midst of the battle, or something. I guess I'll do more horse studies, off photographs and other paintings.Originally Posted by ND Hill
Great skill! I love the way the colors are going on this. I agree with N D HIll and Seven in the strange looking of the horse and the compositional problems.
I think there´s also some perspective problems. The walls of the city and the husars in the back of the picture seems to be very small compared to the officer. There´s also a thing that´s making me feel uncomfortable with the picture, and is the terrein where the horse stands. it look curvy, like a ground not firm engouh. Being so close to a city, I think a more straight ground could work fine with the piece and the perspective. I did a paint over to clarify me. hope you don´t mind and this could be helpful.
Originally Posted by elpez
Wow, cool, not only do I not mind, I think I'll redo the painting along the lines of your paint-over. And as for horse, I think, Ill just knock down his neck and head abit. Thanks alot for taking time to demonstrate what you meant!
Perhaps something very close to frame to give a bit more depth. Some debris or more troops, but out of focus and indistinct, through which we see him.
so, this is where your helpful comments brought me. Do you think this needs more work for it to be classified as "finished"? What should I work on?
I like the last one alot more-but i still find myself getting lost in the flag- the reds loose my eye there. IDK if you need more contrast or not. I think he seems too alone for me. the only other crit would be that he is too detailed for the back ground-there is nothing to really balance that. you might want to up the detail in other places too. but i really like the idea and the armor for one looks amazing! good job thus far
the issues i seee
1. wall goes from detailed to undetialed too quickly.. even some of the transition is hidden behind the horse
2. that werid set of textures behind the horse on the whall.. not really sure what it is.. maybe your trying to portray loose stone but its not really working
3. the brightness of the flag contrasts with the earthtones of the picture way too much.. test out some other colors maybe post your three favorites here and we can help you out
4. still some anatomical issues with the horse me thinks
5. last and certainly least.. red smoke? it just doesnt work and its out of the ordinary... i dont think they had signal flares back then
overall i like i though.. but this is the critique section....
To help you with the horse I'd suggest looking at statues of mounted men, you can't go wrong with them! Yours looks slightly heavy - more shire horse like than the more athletic ones used in warfare. Your main area to change there is the length of the 'shin' bone (dont know what it's called in a horse!!) and the farthes foremost leg (if that makes sense) should naturally stand more level with the closest foremost... i.e the front legs should be together... but still check up the statues to make sure.
Also with the armour, make sure it doesnt cling to the skin - alot of the time when doing armour people (including myself) just exagerate bits of the body and make it look like steel, i think the elbow guard atleast needs looking at, but i maybe just being picky (english civil war re enactor here, babble on about correct shoes at you for hours...!!), i like it though!
Oh shoot, I was afraid this would be the issue. Do you think the perspective would be messed up if I simply cut out the horse and the man above the horse's knees and move them up couple of clicks, and then extend the shins? I wouldn't want to extend the shins downwards, i.e. cut out and then move the legs from the knees to the hooves downwards. Or maybe I should do just that? :/Originally Posted by Phil Moss
So my question is: if I extend only the legs, and the perspective remains the same with respect to the upper part of the man&horse (since I won't repaint them, just cut them out and paste them a little bit above), would this look awkward?
Last edited by miljenko; January 5th, 2007 at 06:33 AM.
The picture is quite cool I think.
But as some mentioned before it is still something wrong with the horse. have another look at horse-pictures on the web. If it is no pony then the rider should be a bit smaller, the horses head should be a bit bigger and its legs should be a bit thinner and longer.
Though I have no great knowledge concerning horses I feel those points could need to be changed.
Hi, the illustration is looking nice. I don't know if someone said this before but one thing that bothers me is the placement of that rd smoke, because it is placed rigth above the flag and the red of the smoke is very close to the one in the flag. Maybe this could be solved by making the area of the red smoke wider so it is still red below the flag or at least placing it higher above the flag.
Just my opinion.
Good luck with it.