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    Troll in a hole

    OK it's my first posting, hope it's in the correct thread! Its basically finished... i think.

    Rip it up and tear it apart! Something isn't quite right but i can't seem to see what it is.

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    Just trying to re-post the image
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    His body is a little shapeless. Also, if you gave him a little more body it would help you to exted him into the frame further so his eye would be at the upper right intersection of the thirds. Then if the clarity of detail of the eye and the facial areas around it was the sharpest part of the work it would definitely give this a strong focal point which would hold people's eyes on the work better. With his eye nearly centered, it makes the work more static and a troll probably should be a dynamic image.

    I thought that putting some shadow on the left edge of the ear to match the shadows at the left of the head would be a good idea. I also thought that there would be some shadow a little below and to the left of the lips, because the lips tend to stick out from the face a bit.
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    Not a bad first post. Now for the ripping and tearing.

    First off, try some hard edge brushes; as it stands it's way too blurry. It might look better if the troll was in focus; it would also help to seperate him from the background more.

    The perspective on the face is pretty skewed as well. The nose and eyes are from almost exact profile, while the mouth is in 3/4 view. I think some face studies or some reference(or both) could help out.

    Keep us posted.
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    I like the harmoious color tone. It gives it a relaxed feel. Try to introduce a new color in the shadow area. It is supposed to be a duller (less saturated) than the light. Right now it is just a darker hue of the same green in the light. Try to introduce a bit of dull blue. Since I can see some blue sky over the forest this would not break the "story" of the picture. Also clearing up some edges. Keep the background a bit blurry and detail less. It helps to push the figure into the front of the picture plane.
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    Thanks everyone, it's amazing how sometimes you can look for hours at a picture and still not see it's faults

    See what you mean about the lack of focal point, and the skewed face, infact all the crits are spot on! Time for a rethink.
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    Here's a re-working. Still not 100% happy, but had enough now, need to move on
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    See! He looks like he's going somewhere. He's got a little more attitude. Nice update.
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