Hey my friend !
Good new start. the colors are working well. Are those colored pencils ?
About the first pages, i think you could spend a bit more time on those. Make a stronger shading.
Anyway, keep it up !
didn't know you had started a new sb! congrats mate!
Everything is looking pretty good mate. On the comic pages, I agree with Daniel - spend some more time on those - get those borders nice, straight and neat so the don't distract the viewer/reader. In comics, it's generally best to have everything as clean and clear as possible. Otherwise it becomes too much for the reader. Also, mixing blue pen and pencil is risky and very difficult, try to stick with media that are the same in colour.
I'm really liking these last two updates - great work dude, keep them coming!
Amazing use of space, and excellent compostitions. Nothing too unreadable. Very accurate forms and the figures have very defined structures. I have to apose that and say the uneven lines in the comics make it feel more hectic and urgent, it strikes me as interesting. Also in the comics there is a very defined demintions to each room the fore ground and the background are very easy for the viewer to seperate. Nice work.
Thanks for the comments guys,
Demented-What up brother.Good to see on my pages.I wanted to do something offbeat but yeah it didnt go the way i planned it. At first the pens were looking but later I saw I overdid it.But i want to experiment with my comic art.So I will keep doing , and yes along with that I will also try to do cleaner, more peo like work as you might call it.
Glad you liked the other updates.
Halifax-thanks for the comments man.Well uneven and rondaom lines do suggest energy .good that you found it interesting.
GLad you liked the comic .
Sup bhanu my man! These masterstudies are looking good - really good. I'd advise you to start focusing in particularlar on your technique - how you shade, draw lines, when where. To me, I think your subjects are shaping well, but your technique hasn't been seeing that kind of improvement. I think if you get your technique up to where your subjects are, you'll be churning out some masterful shiznit man.
Master's studies are looking great, just don't go berserk with the backgrounds In the one with the girl, that hatching on the background looks very random and distracting. I dig your comic style as well, just darken those outlines to make things pop more.
About your Bullies, I really think it will benefit from tidying things up a little. At the moment it's really pretty messy (the upper half of the third page in particular - hard to separate the objects/panels from one another), the outlines in general could be more solid, and I also believe that you should make those hands more accurate.
I don't know if this is just a series of rough draft/brainstorming, but I wanted to point out what I think will be helpful because I really think it has a lot of potential. I personally think it's a bold combination of colors, storyboarding and overall presentation. I reckon you got a lot of good ideas in there, the messy colors/outlines (though I still think some tidying up will do it good) link to the mental distress/disorientation really well. The use of school kid writing and first person narrative is also good for engaging the reader.
Thanks a lot for the comments
Diego-thanks for the advice, Well I am trying to bea bit slower.And tones and values need a lot of work too , thanks for reminding me all that.
Demented-Howz my bro doin? thanks for the heavy advice.I am trying to work on my technique and all, but it doesnt much show thru my work.Dunno why , have to wrok harder.
fedezz- thanks for the advice.I just want to let you know I really dig your work too man.Darken the outlines, will do sir.
Jeri- I am thinking of doing cleaner work, was just trying to experiment you know.Well my hands suck, and also that I was using a pen strightforward so I couldnt correct mistakes. Thanks for the kind words too bro .
Okay so I am really loving the watercolor medium, And have been doing some stuff , though just doodles. I wanted to show you guys some of it to get crits but they are too big, so when I get a digi cma , I might .
Now todays update.
Page 3 inked for Bullies
i dont think this will be the final draft , some bad panels are really killing the whole page.
Well todays my Birthday,
Nothing special , the same old things , cept I will hang out with some frends and all.
Not much in the mood of partying either. Dunno,
So today I will update some sketches I did in my science notebook.
I will do some serious updating in a couple a days.
hi mate, I notice two things, the comic strips are a lot lower in quality compared to the studies that take a few hours.
What does this say? Quality over quantity is always the best policy.
Going slowly lets you think about what you are doing, lets you see your mistakes a lot more clearly than if you rush. Take things slowly, do the mileage with your pencil and eventually, speed will be the byproduct of sound understanding - it is never the other way around.
Thanks a lot for the comment Magic Man ,
Less Even I think that working longer and slower helps us see our mistakes better. I am trying to work more on longer studies .And Also on slower rendering .I have some studies but they are in early stages , I will try posting them when they are nearer to completion.
So heres the sketch.
SOme coments and crits would be appreciated .Hey they never hurt anybody , do they?
Awesome bhanu! These two particularly rock man, like the direction you pencils and pens are going in - playing around with some shapes and comps is always valuable. Realise I haven't rated this thread yet, have a buncha stars mate.
Oh so your names Brendon Eh,
I thought you were more of Andrew, hehe.Glad you liked it man, but comeon you gotta post more of your goodness too mate. STars, oh thank you man. But I am not as good as you guys , gotta do more work. Thanks for being proud too.