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    cliff bathing

    I'm still working on it but I was just curious on what you all think, and what should be done if theres any problems:
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    Wow, i really like the scenery. Very pretty. I'm a little worried however that her head is to big for how slim she is. The other thing is her arm. I feel like the green cloth could use more texture, it really stood out to me when i first saw the pic.

    Great pic tho!
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    torso seems a bit small for the body in general.. but then if you sized the head down that would be less obvious.

    Her (my left leg) that's bent is interesting, but it seems like she isn't putting any weight on it. That might be shadowing though ( i realize this is in process)

    Love the scenery and the coloring style (comic bookish sort of, but a little more vibrant and happy). It's an awesome idea, and to me there is very little wrong with it as is. Beautiful piece. Thanks for sharing.

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    ok, thanks, yeah i'll adjust the head size

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    Its a beautiful piece, my only critques would be the porportions issues liek everyone else.

    her arm seems to be a little thin as aposed to her shoulder.

    You might wanna curl her toes over the cliff to add a little character to her feet too = )

    as far as the color its gorgeuos.

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    heres a revision, I shrank the head gave some textures, added some lighting and flowers, and a butterfly:
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    It's coming out great, the butterfly was a good idea, as it's now clear where she's looking at. Great work on the foilage as well, keep it comin.

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    I'm not to sure what else to do, its pretty close to being finished i think

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    her head is huge. realy huge. definitely shrink it down the best you can. also, the lighting on the environment doesnt match the lighting on her. the perspective is off in a few places too but with all the details already in id leave it alone.. but watch for it next time. this is a great design and you've done great work.. but these details can make or break it for you. the rendering is superb.. do the best to fix that head of hers. - JAG
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    oo yeah i see the perspective problem, i didn't notice that before, i'm gona work some more on it

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    I agree with JAG.

    but it has to be told. it looks realy cool allready!

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    I agree on the head being huge. Also she look a bit pasted onto her environment/background. I think it's the difference in rendering style and the lack of sharpness and contrast in the env. Finally I think we look too much on top of the place she's sitting considering the horizon is just behind it. Otherwise I think its a great painting. I like the light, especially on the skin.

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    heres a revision, shrank the head added more color, added bracelet lowered platform persp, adjusted stomach v, tighened env a little:

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    it does look better.. but the head is still a bit large. some more tweaking wouldn't hurt. keep it up - JAG
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