I like except that the rendering looks a bit too flat.. The motorbike with the cow decals is cool.
what about making the colored outlines a lil bit darker round the skin of the girl and the pig? they both look a bit blurred. think that's where the flatness comes from...
It does feel a bit flat. 1st thing you see is the background. Love the energy in the sketches.
the original sketches are just awesome. the final render, like others said, feels a bit off. the dark outlines around the background elements push the foreground away. composition could use some work too. they feel pasted onto the background.
could be pretty snazzy with a bit of changes, though.
Your value structure is what loses it for me. You're pulling the viewer's eye around the canvas in a pretty hap-hazard and random way. You have to think about a hierarchy of contrast, and save the areas of greatest contrast for those important places you really want the viewer's eye to be drawn to and linger over.
Right now you're telling me that the most important points in this piece are: the motorcycle, the pig's hat, the top of that barn structure and those windows in the background (in that order). Is that what you intended?
you're definitely suffering from the same problem that you were with your angel piece, but you managed to clean that up real nice. I think you might be afraid to make your shadows too dark, but you really need to get dark darks where there need to be. I can't even tell that the girl's pants are shaded, and barely with the pig. Your characters are paler and less saturated than your background, and that makes no sense. All I see when I look at that picture is the giant barn and how dark it is, and then this wacky motorcycle in which the pattern is very distracting. Dull down the background, and up the contrast on your main characters. Push them forward.
Hope that helps!
thanks to everybody, all your comments are always welcome, I gotta say that sometimes is kinda of hard to spot the weak points of our personal work in the rush that comes when you believe that the piece it`s finish.
I hope to post real soon the improved piece!!!!
once again thanks to everybody who had take the time to check my work!!!
the pencils and sketches are superb.
the final, though, is a bit busy, and confusing on the eye.
too many colors(VIBRANT colors....), too many focal points,
not enough definition on light and shade.
here`s your piece after a simple color/contrast adjustments
(hope it`s alright with you...):
your drawings are great. love the designs.
keep at it, mate.
you have to choose focal points. at the moment, my eye jumps directly to the motorcycles texture. and I didn't even notice the figure standing at the left because my eyes were caught by the backround.
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Once again THANKS FOR THE COMMENTS!!!
I tried to fix the original Illustrator file based on your comments, but I gotta admit I got lost between so many groups and paths !!!
Originally I did not want to color the piece in Photoshp or Painter, however since making modifications to the original file would take me mopre time than I expected, I finaly decided to export the elements (already colored in illustrator) to photoshop and tried to do some modifications in this softwere.
Thanks You guys!!! It´s cool to know I can rely on you to review my own work in a more objetive way and improve it!!!
for a larger view of the pic go to http://122476.deviantart.com/
Once again Thanks to all who had take the time to check my work!!!
Last edited by 122476; September 7th, 2006 at 10:35 AM.