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    Hi, everyone. This is my latest character design. I've spent 2 days now working on this character. I really need your opinions (how can I make it look better, fix the anatomy, etc) before I start painting this character. Please paint or draw over if you feel like it.

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    The most obvious mistake I see is her left hand. Find some ref (or even just use your own hand as a guide). Her feet seems pointed in an awkward direction. I think it will be more natural-looking if you point her left foot towards the viewer.

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    I don't get the thick outline, it's just kinda there. It emphasizes the monotony of the line, things could be helped by making the lines of her body more rounded, then the line around the dress and weapons more angular. Most confusing are the three sticks sticking out of her back, what are those things? Just some tweaks is all I can think of, get rid of the sterno-mastoid line and put a small line under her chin, use convex lines on the forarms. Besides the technical stuff, her character could be better defined, she has lots of weapons so I guess she would be a warrior but she doesn't look like a warrior, no muscle mass no strength in her face. You could thicken her nose a bit, and make her eyebrows a little more horizontal. Basically emphasize verticals and horizontals, see how her jaw is rounded, that makes her look cute and harmless. Various details could be added to emphasize character and back story, maybe put an armband or some type of insignia somewhere, that's just a basic suggestion, you should push it more than that.

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    Thank guys. I fixed her arms and feet a little bit (as Aerythes suggested). I also make her looks more rounded and add the line under her chin (like armando said).

    I spent another 2-3 hrs doing grayscale coloring alone (spent too much time on it).

    I'll keep working on the background tonight. I hope to finish the whole thing tomorrow. Thanks again.

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    What are those things projecting from her back?

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    Yes, and where do they attach? What is their purpose? Are they armor or ornament?

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    Forgive me for saying it, but she doesn't look like "a hot female samurai." She looks like a girl from a teen fashion magazine with a bunch of swords stuck on her. Who's just hit her funny bone.


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    hrhr elwell = master of bring it to the damn point
    the problem is she doesn't even wear a kimono or some samurai like armour
    only the swords
    give her a fighting position and one sword into the hands give her a kimono or armour

    look for the "ledgend of the 5 rings" ccg it has a lot of hot female samurai card illunstrations

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    hi! It's not bad!
    I'd change her skirt in a samuray pants, and maybe if you draw her with naked feet or with japanese shoes is better. I will put in hand the short sword, samuray had normally 2 sword with themselves: the long two hands sword and the short one (used to kill himself while another one cut the head later). You could also change her hairs, with a more japanese style and putting there something in hae hairs.

    it could be interesting if you make her "west" girl, (blond or red hair, and "normal" eyes) but dressed adn with hair cut like samurai!

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    Quote Originally Posted by d00dle
    ok, 'bout the thing on here back, it's "Scabbard."
    Yes, we kind of guessed that, but are they krazy glued to her back? And where are their other ends?
    Are they extra empty scabbards, in case she feels like putting her swords someplace else for a change? Or does she carry around five swords at all times because she's incredibly clumsy and is always dropping them?


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    Her shoulder looks beautiful. A bit too thin on the outside of her lower right arm though. Her lips are a bit off the axies. I don't have experience with designing atm, so no comments on that. Keep up and finish the beauty. Good luck.

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    Doesn't make any sense to have 5 swords. Maybe four would work if she swung them with her feet.

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    yea, i would start a new drawing with maybe ONE katana, ONE wakisashi, and maybe ONE tanto, and put her in a dynamic pose that would make her look semi-believable

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