Started this one this morning and wanted to finish it before going to bed. C&C always welcome!
Hello there Fellah,
I like the mood of this image and the textures (that rock up front is lovely)
Though the outlines of the sword of the guy(-thing) up front could be a bit straighter, dunno if it was intentional ofcourse Maybe the sword is just used a bit much.
I think my main crit is that you should come out of that comfort zone of monsters and rock environments, we all know you're good at this! Now show us you're good at everything else too (well, not ťverything else, but you know a bit more).
Very, very interesting. I wanted to say something about composition being all unconventional and way too .... well, how to say it,... an opposite to smooth.. but then I started to think I should be glad instead. Making my horizon wider too to see unusual ideas. So I think strange compositions is good. Could be stranger after all, you could make an effect all those rocks falling forward on viewers. So until this happened lets be grateful .
Well, you know I hope that this piece has mood, feeling of midnight. It doesn't feel like silent to me, because of the many barriers you put for the one of the guy, he will not be able to move without any noise.
Again like in the last painting in FF section you are confusing me where are my eyes should go first, you put highly sharpened highlights on BG (moon) and Foreground (the knife and face of the guy with weird hairdo). And you somehow skipped showing them in not so far from him objects (bark of the tree).
Silhouette of the guy standing against the moon should be darker, he is standing against pretty strong source of light and the other source of light is far from him and probably much, much weaker, torch or something.
I like the tension in the figure of the guy on the tree, good body language.
I like him totally and I understand that he will lose a lot if you make him all dark, the cautious pose for one and maybe volume. Still think it would be better if he was darker. Helps to feel the night, you know.
Like the face of the front guy and how you play with lighting, although I have feeling you are manipulating us, this lighting is very strange in how it falls.
I would appreciate the texture on the tree, at least something there.
Overall it is interesting image but feels like an experiment.
Thank you for the comment in my book, could write even shorter than that?
Like one word, half of the word, a letter, exclamation pont. Jeez! Someone is being quite lazy to say real crits..
Last edited by sve; August 13th, 2006 at 08:20 PM.
Still think, it is too many highlights and hints where to look. My eyes are all over the image and they don't stop, but going in very strange trajectory.
I need to go where you point me to go with my eyes, and that's to an outline of tree, very bright highlights, compete with everything, to the moon, very bright front guy, maybe he is the main focus, I don't know anymore.
I shouldn't not forget to shift my eyes to the knife and to the lighting from the cave, I need to have time to be everywhere. There is no hierarchy in where to look first, they all complete with each other.
You put so many highlights on the farther figure, don't be so greedy, figure is great, but it will be enough to do just outline of the figure from the moon. The figure itself would be better if darker and almost no details seen on it.
I think it will even add to scary factor, not seeing clearly who he is. His knife is too shiny, just thin outlines will be better.
You are being too greedy for effects in this painting, I think, calm down, keep it under control. Less is more.
Highlights of the front guy is very, very bright, it destroys the night feeling. Everything is too loud, should be calmer and quieter, IMHO.
Last edited by sve; August 13th, 2006 at 10:08 PM.
I really like it, the moonlight on that guy in the background is gorgeus!
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I think the guy with the knife could be in [a little more] darker values, will made the highlights more efficients in my [humble] opinion. Aside that, it's a good picture, carrying mood and STORY ! I like when a single picture can contain a little story. Can't wait to see what you will be able to do with sequential stuff.
Always a pleasure to see your art, mon ami Simon.
Hey Simon, really nice one. You're doing some really nice stuff these days.
Love this one, good job on the highlights, they are really well done especially on the assasin. But composition wise I don't think it does so well. Someone wrote something about the composition, and it really made me think. Did you plan the composition? What bothers me and keeps me distracted is the hole beneath the assasin and the horn on the guard. The horn points me out of the picture to the left and the hole keeps my view away from the assasin (this could be the idea though, what do I know). Other than that I think you're doing a fabulos work Had to give you my thoughts on something
Hugs my friend. It's been to long since I wrote to you.
Nice mood in this one, well every pic you do has a nice mood. For a crit Something is happening with the knife I think maybe i would like to see him holding it, but maybe not. The knife I think can be in a perspective that is more flat, and maybe longer, because the tip is so close to the tip of the mountain it is createing a uncomfortable focal point, so maybe makeing it longer and overlapping the volcanoe might solve that, but you know it is just a silly crit, and that might not even work, whatever lets just say it's an idea, haha poo!
great mood and colors. great painting.
love the face of the guy in the first plane.
no crits from me.
With this one, you've reached a new level : it is much more defined than your previous paintings, and that's a good point to me.
Strong contrast, clearly shaped characters, nice color scheme ... good. It is much more smashing than usual.
Be careful : too much highlights on the background, as said Sve.
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The only crit I can offer that someone hasn't already said has to do with the silhouette of the assassin guy. I think it would be stronger if his left arm was out away from his body. He'd look more ready for action that way.
Anywho, it's a great intriguing picture. I'd love to see an update on it based on the critiques you've recieved.