Finished drawings don't have sketchlines still visible and dirty pencil smears all over the papers.
Drawings for the Finally Finished Section (which should be Pro Section) have correct anatomy (or intendedly mangled anatomy), so this will most probably be transferred to the Sketches Section... after a little bashing probably.
This isn't going to be one of those where folks give their opinions, you make a couple minor changes, then say "thanks, but I'm done listening to you", is it?
I don't mean to be confrontational, but your last thread received oodles of replies (some new members would love to have half the number), then you pretty much threw up the hand; and I just wanted to know if this was going to be the same (prior to really commenting).
No, I hope you comment this one, I will change it as necessary.
I haven't used a reference for this pic so any error I've done I would like to correct. The previous pic however I did with a reference which was 95% the same (the body structure -hips and breasts) and that's why I didn't feal like making any more changes.
I'm sorry if I offended anyone. I really could use help, because I haven't taken any classes in my life and am struggling on my own, so any help is well appreciated.
If the reference for that vampiress actually looked like that, please post it in the thread 'cause I think we'd all like to take a look at it (I don't think any human could possibly look like that). Please, please post it. I need a good laugh this morning.
Well for starters the pose is really stiff and un-natural. The anatomy is pretty mushy, especially on the right arm and shoulder (His left). With his left arm in that position, his "Lat" muscle wouldn't come up that high- it probably wouldn't be visible at all. The way you've drawn it, it looks like he's got some weird new muscle growing between his pec and his tricep.
Also his lateral oblique area (just to the left of his "six pack") looks "caved-in" like someone took a bite out of him there. The hatching goes in the wrong direction, it's a little too dark (comparatively) and it indents too much. It makes it look like he's missing several ribs or something. Lastly, the head's a strange shape. It angles steeply from his cheek bone to his chin, like he doesn't have a back to his jaw (Where it meets by his ear).
There you go.
Well, the musculature, especially that of the torso, isn't reacting like human muscles do. Also, his right arm doesn't appear to be connected to the body. And it's funny that you aren't using a reference (you really, really should, as it would help tremendously and doesn't seem to be difficult), because the feet look like he's standing on something, vice hanging from a line.
Hopefully sone will pony up and do a quick shot of this as well. Sone rocks.