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    smells.like.spring

    unfortunatly it shows up very differently on different monitors.

    ...in case of more interrest or if nothin' works,
    please click here:
    http://www.messstudio.com/bb/viewtopic.php?t=2331

    i would really appreciate if you could tell me to what i should pay more attention in my next painting and i would be glad if someone could point out to me what i could definitively improve.

    thank you

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    less detail. this thing is so busy its hard to look at. nice concept, but sadly the execution is lacking. no offense, buddy, but yah, wayyyy too busy.

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    yeh i'm not sure what i'm looking at,right now it seems like a big mass of colour

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    You've also got a problem with imaginary trees. Few of them continue up as massive trucks, then end abtuptly as a mass of little purple flowers leap from the trunks, sans limbs. The little winding nubs are formulaic, too. Their position, size, and shape just look too unnatural. Just like it's a good idea to know human anatomy when drawing people, it's a good idea to have a particular tree (or anything else which is of a certain look) referenced. When it's not right, it's noticable.

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    The colours seem very saturated at the moment, and there isn't a very clearly defined light source.

    Your idea is great, it is just a bit too busy - there are too many petals blocking the focal point (the girl in the robes) of the image, and the angle complicates it a bit as well. You don't want to block out the most important part of the image

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    Twist your head anti-clockwise 45 degrees, that should help a little.

    The pros have hit the mark, nothing for me to say.

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    keep trying its good, but next time you make something like this, lessen the saturation of the petals. i dont want to put you down, it seems that people are too harsh on this site. i know you have potential.

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    I'm not sure why so many people seem to think simple critique on this site is so harsh. Everyone's just trying to help each other correct flaws.

    Anywho, in addition to what all the others said, you should use cloth reference to understand how it moves. Your robe doesn't really read as fabric.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Snogger
    keep trying its good, but next time you make something like this, lessen the saturation of the petals. i dont want to put you down, it seems that people are too harsh on this site. i know you have potential.
    And that is why I see this as the best forum for artists. If I posted something and got zero replies but saw other threads being posted on I would be offended. But instead they post what they dont like about the piece and suggest ways to improve upon it. That is key for any learning artist in my opinion. Some have a difficult time accepting critiques, I was one of them for some time, but I soon opened my eyes and saw what they saw and I was rather shocked

    forever!

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    thank you all for your critique. i understand that basically it is way too noisey. like a big mess of colours in ones wicked mind. it's all goode. i'm not offended at all, i just wish i could get even more opinions on this.
    this forum is great. not like deviant or some' where all i get is stuff like:
    'pretty flowers'

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    petal layers

    what really bugs me here is that the petals only have two layers... really close and really far away... i suggest putting more size and opacity variance in that brush you used and add some more angle variance to fill out the rest of the space between the lady and the viewer... as is it seems the petals are falling in symmetry waves... like all of a sudden, BAM! a wave of leaves fall, rather than having them fall continuously at their own individual pace... that to me would just add so much to this piece

    i like the purple and the tree texture is very interesting... like veins almost...

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