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March 8th, 2006 #1
It seems empty
What does it need? A boat maybe?
Are there any other problems besides the fact that it is empty looking?
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Looks like the light is coming from behind that pillar yet it's illuminated as if the light was just above it. Move the pillar's shadow? It's also blurry, making the stone pillar look soft.
March 8th, 2006 #3
i don't mind the "emptiness," it emphasizes the isolation and loneliness of the stack island. however, the water area doesn't communicate much depth -- it's too saturated, not really the proper hue (unless it's tainted with a lot of copper minerals), and has no surface texture to speak of -- even calm water has some ripples and textural qualities. also, it should be reflecting the clouds and mainland to a degree. dig up some refs of pacific lagoons, which have deep turquoise water similar to what you seem to want, and are often calm.
the volume & form of the island is fairly strong, but it needs a lot more texture if you want it to look natural. as it is, it looks both artificial and sort of miniature, as it's so smooth and a bit soft-focus.
the arc of the cable needs to be handled more carefully -- to my eyes, the far end curves in such a way as to end up way in the sky above the mainland. also if it is fading due to aerial perspective, then your water should also, and the shoreline/horizon would be less distinct.
i like the concept, makes me wonder what is going on in that factory-like thing that needs to be so isolated. also makes me sorry for the poor sod who has to tend the place
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March 8th, 2006 #4
yeah waterstructure would help much
March 9th, 2006 #5
Thank you all for the wonderful crits. I had a little bit of time to work on it in class today, but my time was limited. I still need to fix the water and reflect the clouds, but tell me what you think.
March 9th, 2006 #6
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March 9th, 2006 #7
Even though I assume the buildings are supposed to be regular sized, on top of a huge pillar, they look tiny. Partly this is because of the height of the horizon, which makes it look like we are standing just a few feet away. If you lowered the horizon to just above the base of the pillar it would do a lot for the sense of scale. Also, then it wouldn't be cutting both the pillar and the picture almost exactly in half.
The color of the water also bothers me. That intense blue-green looks like a swimming pool, or the water in a Club Med ad. It doesn't go with the industrial feel of the piece.
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April 7th, 2006 #9
i'd like to see finer detail on the rock formation
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i would like make a boat close to the rock an one further away but like not old boats but also not realy modern more a bit industrial with shimneys and big weels on the side