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    Hey there,
    I was wondering what people thought of this piece, I've been playing with scratchboard type of style in Photoshop, and wanted to get some objective opinions. The bug shape is supposed to be the mothman.
    Isn't it scarry...
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    I like the car window feel, but the image seems unbalanced. The different shapes and elements just seem to be too heavy to the right. And with three points of the white being so close to hitting the edges tangentially isn't helping. It isn't necessarily hurting, but it might help to reposition it all in the frame. One thing I could see that might help the composition would be putting a line or two inside the car, suggesting some interior features (though they could be vague, just some white shapes, perhaps slim, paralleling the bottom of the window).

    Pretty darn cool.

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    Yes,

    I think you were right. That was the something that was bothering me.
    I also added some shapes, maybe too many now, to show the door interior.
    Thanks alot, I appreciate the comments.
    Here's my adjustment.
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    I think the adjustment looks a lot nicer, it gives more dimension to the image. If you're going for a scratchboard look though I would add some croshatching for textures since that's really where traditional media scratchboards's streangth is.

    I like the subject matter too. I saw an unexplained myseries or some such show on mothman when I was about ten, it scared the piss out of me.

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    Well, I was really thinking about just adding a few more white bits (like the suggestion of the backseat window, perhaps the front windscreen and maybe some thin white strips indicating an arm rest). By having the bottom of the window not parallel to the ground and introducing the non-white elements, you've changed the clean feel and now the incongruities are getting in the way of what was a very clean image. The wavering lines and gradients are taking away too much from the focal point, as well. I wish I could get to my posting tools because a 45 second fix really made a large difference in opening up the composition (a triangle covering the upper right corner, one on the right side and a couple strips just below the window line, parallel to it).

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    redo too

    Hey thanks for the comments guys. They really help alot.
    I think the simple white does look better. I wonder if I should tilt the composition alittle clockwise.

    Here's redo 2:
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    I would suggest lowering the glow on the eyes, it's taking up the whole head.

    try making the eyes more shiny and round.

    still keep some of the glow though.

    Good work.

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