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This is Rylee from the Texas. I thought I'd paint her.
Here's 2 hours of work (on and off) with the image that's I'm using as reference.
Tell me what I'm doing right/wrong.
Thank you, I take all critiques into condiseration and actually love them more than Strawberry Toaster Strutles.
Last edited by MattGamer; December 4th, 2005 at 08:24 PM.
I think you have a great start so far. the flesh tones aren't that bad, either. But as anyone would advise, you should lay color in the ENTIRE composition before taking it too far with one particular aspect. The reason being is that if you devote too much time to detail early on for on particular section, that section will seem "isolated" and in a world of it's own. It also will force you to dictate the rest of the colors according to the flesh tone you put down, since you won't want to re-do all that work when you find that the flesh isn't matching very well color-wise with the rest of the portrait.
Alright, thanks a bunch ParkerD. So your saying to just not go into detail too early into the piece. Like after I've figured out the sizes and colors then that's when I should go into detail? Okie Dokie. Thanks again!
that, and it may be an idea to rough out your composition and background at this point. it will allow for any quick changes, if theres something that may cast a shadow on her, for example, before you get too bogged down in your final rendering. great skin tones, good likeness so far, just watch it with the mouth, you dont want to make her a boy (add some more pink). shes a cutie is she a singer?
The one thing that I would go for, and this is probably just an opinion, is to capture that stance she has going on a little better. Her hip sticks out a bit and she has her back curved back just a hint, too. So, I think that maybe that would capture a little more of the attitude of her pose. I hope that this helped some.
Hey... Just one thing really... the midsection looks a little too long.....Great attempt though.
I think as for likeness she hads more right cheek showing in the reference than in your picture. look at the curve from the shaddow thats cast from her hair on the right side. Take a look at the nose area i think the angle could be improved less of the left cheek is showing.. look at the triangle between the nose and the eye and compare to the reference. In fact theres slightly more of a curve to that side of the face in the reference than in your drawing.
i also agree with the midsction length stated above.
good job so far though with only 2 hours i am impressed!
UPDATE: 5 more hours. In all 7 hours of work (on and off).
'stoph.: she might be a singer. i met her on myspace. thanks for the tips!
madplanet: thanks! but as you can see, i've already painted her. maybe i could edit some stuff and make her
bluephoenix: thanks! i can see that, maybe i'll change it - maybe not. heh
imperess: thank you. yes, i squished her face a bit in the new one to make her look more like the ref. i love her shirt, and i'm gonna ask her if i can have it. haha.
the only crit I'm going to give is that the mouth could look a little more pouty...extend the line of her mouth a little more...other than that I think this is pretty accurate...good deal...
Ok, update - another hour and a half; worked on the sizes and crap:
capt underoo: thanks for the crit. i worked on her mouth. how does it look?
Love the critz, keep them coming!
Last edited by MattGamer; November 13th, 2005 at 08:39 PM.
dunno if youve noticed it or had it pointed out to you, but her upper body is slightly longer than that in the photo. i dont get the impression that youre painting at a larger scale - note that the grass and fence match up to that in the photo - and when regarding the proportions of the legs and head, id say this is very much the case (that the torso is too tall). very nice updates so far tho
EDIT: oh and not to be crude, her chest is lacking a little bit compared to the ref. i think its because her belly doesnt angle in as much as it should on the left side of screen.
looking good so far. i think you need to watch the pelvis and the way its slanting in the ref. that makes a big impact on weight and connection to upper body. hair mass also has more height in the ref; especially towards the back of her head. all minor stuff, but check it out.
check the Tensai Tokyo Sketch Thread (Sketchbook)
check the Tensai Cityscapes Thread (Finally Finished)
Originally Posted by strych9ine
you all are too nice to comment on my piece. more!
'stoph.: oi, vey. your right! my paint just like a little bigger than her. thanks for pointing it out. i'll try to work on this on my spare time on Wednesday (work and school block today and tomorrow). and yes, that belly. i keep telling myself i'll get it later, but forget. ha.
tensai: thanks! i will fix these minor/major things soon.
It's December 1st already and I can't believe I haven't worked on this piece earlier! I've fleshed out a few things and made a few size adjustments here and there. I think I painted her fatter than the ref, holy crap, what was i smokin'!? Probably another hour's work.
Note: This girl's name is not AVA, it's Rylee and she lives in Texas. The person who put up her pictures on Myspace.com was false and made a fake account with Rylee's pictures. It's sad because now Rylee now is off Myspace and deleted her account because yet another girl was impersonating her! How crazy is that?! Thankfully one of Rylee's friends told me before I went to the UK and married this impersonator.
excellent work, i really like the pose and her skin looks very real, good job!
just a few tiny crits
i think her nose sticks out some more and the left cheek/side fo the face goes out more before curving back to the chin. It also seems that from the bottom up to the stomach its the same size, then the rest is elongated. Also by the left side of her ribs, right where her elbow is on the left, her body curves at a more slanted angle to meet the hips.
FinalUPDATE: All crits welcomed! I just think I'm a little burned out on this one and think that if I messed with it anymore then I would have to restart from scratch or something and reprogram my brain into another way of painting it.
I changed the angles and sizes of many things [2 hours]. I still think I made her a little fatter. Sorry Rylee!!!
I think that this is the LONGEST I have ever spent on one picture alone. Totaling to about 11½ hours. Gorsh! Thanks for all the comments so far! They are greatly appreciated!
Last edited by MattGamer; December 4th, 2005 at 09:10 PM.