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    Evin, elven girl

    I really should post here more often.
    I would love feedback on the colours and genereal impression. You know, trying to improve and be m4d 1337 :p

    cheers!
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    Evin, elven girl
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    nicely done but it seems as if her hair your eyes done even see it it blends in and something odd about her face like its not joined onto her next and a little out of place or something... but very well done

    -a few seconds later! AHA that's it!!! her jaw seems a little low
    O_o *tweak*

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    I like her face but I agree about her hairline, I find it too low and too blended into the forhead.

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    Guess thats a matter of personal taste...
    Thanks for the comments tho!
    No thoughts on the colours?

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    I think what they're trying to say is that it appears the hairline goes right up to her eyebrow.

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    My first impression says that you worked hard on the face. (The reflected light on that upper lip is a nice touch!) Maybe used reference. Something about were the jawline and neck meet seems wrong though to me . . . Like it is too sharp or something? However, compared to the face, everything outside of it seems to have been carelessly done. Or maybe no reference? The shirt, hair and body are not as convincing as the rest of the peice. They are not subject to the same lighting either. . . . As far as color harmony goes (I am by no means the expert on light and color) I dig it. Nice execution of an analogous scheme, and the overall saturation level of the piece seems to be balanced. Nice work!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Bowlin
    I think what they're trying to say is that it appears the hairline goes right up to her eyebrow.
    That is true, but its not a human, things can look different on a fantasy creature. The greenish tint is ment to go so far down to make a difference to her red cheeks.

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    There are a bunch of things I really like in this, and a bunch that bug me. Please excuse my quick and dirty paintover. Here's what I did:
    Lowered and shrank the face.
    Shrank the mouth slightly.
    Rotated the left eye slightly, and moved the pupil to correct the gaze.
    Lowered and rotated her ear.
    Trimmed in the shape of her jaw.
    Shifted most of her hair towards yellow so it doesn't look like it's two different colors, and defined it from the background a little more.
    Cropped the bottom to improve the composition.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Mr. Indigo
    My first impression says that you worked hard on the face. (The reflected light on that upper lip is a nice touch!) Maybe used reference. Something about were the jawline and neck meet seems wrong though to me . . . Like it is too sharp or something? However, compared to the face, everything outside of it seems to have been carelessly done. Or maybe no reference? The shirt, hair and body are not as convincing as the rest of the peice. They are not subject to the same lighting either. . . . As far as color harmony goes (I am by no means the expert on light and color) I dig it. Nice execution of an analogous scheme, and the overall saturation level of the piece seems to be balanced. Nice work!

    Well, Im not arguing over what your saying here. I just wonder...
    Thing is, loads of people focus on the essencials when drawing faces, ofcourse I have been looking at Linda Bergkvists work now and then and she has a fantastique way of blurring the non essentials.
    Your thoughts that the rest of the portrait, everything but the face has had less love, is it cause its your personal taste that everything should be detailed or is it cause I have not detailed it just enough to get away with it?

    I have a blurrline right now that goes from the ear and inwards in the picture, should I maybe move it back or towards the camera?

    As for reference, the picture is inspired by a photo of a girl named Evin but its not a reference or copy in any way as she is not an elf And mostely, colours are verry different. I did try however, to imitate some of her natural assymetry , toning it down a bit. The real life evins mouth is offset and her nose is a bit bigger... and her eyes are different.. and the rest is different. Anyhow

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    the forehead needs to be bigger and the jawline brough up and more redefined
    other than that good job

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    Quote Originally Posted by Elwell
    There are a bunch of things I really like in this, and a bunch that bug me. Please excuse my quick and dirty paintover. Here's what I did:
    Lowered and shrank the face.
    Shrank the mouth slightly.
    Rotated the left eye slightly, and moved the pupil to correct the gaze.
    Lowered and rotated her ear.
    Trimmed in the shape of her jaw.
    Shifted most of her hair towards yellow so it doesn't look like it's two different colors, and defined it from the background a little more.
    Cropped the bottom to improve the composition.
    Thanks for your input.
    I think that most of the things you have corrected are matters of taste. Things like making the hair yellow makes no sense, and correcting assymetric things in the face takes away the personality she has.
    Im thinking about painting a couple more of them though as this one didnt take so long so I'll keep your thoughts on beauty and characteristics in mind.

    I'm not trying to brush you off here, I like hands on critics, thankyou!
    cheers!
    /Alice

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    I do prefer Elwells version i have to say, but then that does come down to taste. You could omit a few of the corrections but the cropping is essential i feel.
    Last edited by Hybridstar; November 8th, 2005 at 06:38 AM.

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    cropping of the whole picture?

    edit, guess thats what you mean, I tried to go for a "tall and majestic" creature. Isnt that taken away a bit by the corrections and cropping?
    Last edited by Alice; November 7th, 2005 at 09:36 AM.

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    Thats fine, but because you havent indicated the width of the body the length doesnt really read.
    Last edited by Hybridstar; November 8th, 2005 at 06:41 AM.

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    You know what, you asked for feedback but to each and every comment that was made you replied that it was a matter of taste. Please, keep something in mind, if you are making paintings for your own fun it's all right but if you ever intend to sell your work, or get job as an artist, listening to what people say becomes important, if 9 ppl out of 10 think your forehead is too low, then it's too low.
    If you don't want crits, don't ask for them.

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