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    Red face My WIPs and odd sketches

    Okay, this will be a place were I place wips of pictures. Now, I don't mind some critiqueing, but, please be aware, that sometimes I have worked a bit too far to fix it, or the medium I am drawing in is not easily correct. (ie. pen and ink) Thanks very much. Take care.

    This is a more realistic sketch of my chracter Lune. I have been working on it recently, and have fixed some of the mistakes you can see here. I just would like to have you guys see what I am working on right now. ^^

    My WIPs and odd sketches

    Lune in my normal style of drawing wich is of course Anime, though a bit more realistic than most. ((It was forced upon me by an art teacher... >.<)) It's just from a large unfinished sketch of he and his two brothers. I love the way it turned out though... ^^

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    I will upload more later.^^

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    Your facial anatomy needs a lot of work. You are not showing any of the musculature or skeletal structures, you are just drawing long, narrow egg shapes, and then putting symbols of a mouth, or an eye on them, with a nose in between, and a bunch of long stringy hair on one side. Although Manga oriented (they are not animated, so are not anime), which is usually very formulatic, these two pieces are so inconsistant that I would not have thought them to be the same character, had you not told us.

    This character "Lune," has no personality. He has overly large pointy ears with too much junk hanging off them (no wonder they bend so hard), and he needs a haircut. That's about it.
    * His eyes look different in size and shape from one picture to the next
    * The length of his face is different everytime you draw it.
    * The shape of the noses and the ears is also different in each picture.

    You need to refine your drawing style for consistency. If this is a character you created, you should write down as much about him as you can, and then try to draw the description.

    Practice making circles until you can draw 5 of them one after another, each one the same basic size and roundness as the other 4...

    Practice drawing an entire head before trying to cover it up or hide flaws with a bunch of hair. You need to be able to draw a head with cheekbones on both sides, and eye sockets, showing the depth of hollows in the skull where eye balls reside.

    Read and practice some face/head tutorials, so you can learn to place features correctly and more balanced on the face.

    Practice drawing something else besides "Lune," to sharpen your eye-hand coordination. Something "real," not "imagined," like your foot, a piece of furniture, or a Still Life.

    Keywords you should focus on are:
    Consistency
    Anatomy
    Depth
    Form
    Value

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    Unhappy

    Thank you so very much for the critique. I do very much understand that I have a long way to go. I am only seventeen, and I don't expect meself to be the art genius my art teachers think me to be. In fact I think I am quite bad at most things, however, that is beside the point. As for "personality" I am currently working on expressions on my MANY characters. I actually rarely draw Lune, but, these were the couple of sketches in my photobucket account.

    As for inconsistancies. Forgive me. I try to make the character look as close as possible. Face length sometimes is shortened, because I am sketching not drawing. I usually try to keep the same shape and markings. The reason his ears are so big, is because he is a part elf. I will not go into the details. And, I never knew there was anything wrong with artists being gothic/puck. I wonder if you would get on a very popular artists but for having some twenty earings on their characters ears. Probably not. Besides that fact, I am mainly self taught, though I do take art classes. I KNOW my drawings have inconsistancies, and I work on each one at a time. Trying to tackle all of my bad points would be murder.

    Write down... He was a crack drawing at first a year ago, I am slowly refining him and my style. I want to find a style I am comfortable with, before I do something set. I am sure even you can understand that. And the eyes... Well one is Manga therefore the eyes are a bit bigger I suppose. And the other is supposed to be realistic. I am working on drawing from life. I a currently working on a self portrait by the way. Though realism quite bores me along with still life. It's not that I can't do them (because I have), it is because I don't FEEL like doing them.

    Um, the bottom one is a "sketch" That means I was dorking around and not actually drawing. I drew in the hair, then tried to make it so you could see the lower part of the eye, which failed miserably. But I don't since it is a sketch. A

    I've drawn things from life. I do it from time to time. But, I am a very imaginative person. (I thought all artists were) So I get wisked away, and draw what I feel like. I see no wrong in drawing how and what you want. What defines REAL artists is not the ability to draw real things. It is the ability to draw, and draw what you like. AND! I am going to hopefully take an anatomy class next year. By the way, I learn by eye. and sometimes it takes me half a year or more to refine things to make it right. Good thing I didn't post one of my full characters... I'm SURE you would have found something wrong with that too... Thanks again. I will be keeping those things in mind. But, since I am the artist, I will use and forget them how I want. If I don't feel like doing it... I won't.

    I'm so glad... There are nicer people out there.

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    Quote Originally Posted by VampireSyan
    Thank you so very much for the critique. I do very much understand that I have a long way to go. I am only seventeen, and I don't expect meself to be the art genius my art teachers think me to be. In fact I think I am quite bad at most things, however, that is beside the point. As for "personality" I am currently working on expressions on my MANY characters. I actually rarely draw Lune, but, these were the couple of sketches in my photobucket account.

    As for inconsistancies. Forgive me. I try to make the character look as close as possible. Face length sometimes is shortened, because I am sketching not drawing. I usually try to keep the same shape and markings. The reason his ears are so big, is because he is a part elf. I will not go into the details. And, I never knew there was anything wrong with artists being gothic/puck. I wonder if you would get on a very popular artists but for having some twenty earings on their characters ears. Probably not. Besides that fact, I am mainly self taught, though I do take art classes. I KNOW my drawings have inconsistancies, and I work on each one at a time. Trying to tackle all of my bad points would be murder.

    Write down... He was a crack drawing at first a year ago, I am slowly refining him and my style. I want to find a style I am comfortable with, before I do something set. I am sure even you can understand that. And the eyes... Well one is Manga therefore the eyes are a bit bigger I suppose. And the other is supposed to be realistic. I am working on drawing from life. I a currently working on a self portrait by the way. Though realism quite bores me along with still life. It's not that I can't do them (because I have), it is because I don't FEEL like doing them.

    Um, the bottom one is a "sketch" That means I was dorking around and not actually drawing. I drew in the hair, then tried to make it so you could see the lower part of the eye, which failed miserably. But I don't since it is a sketch. A

    I've drawn things from life. I do it from time to time. But, I am a very imaginative person. (I thought all artists were) So I get wisked away, and draw what I feel like. I see no wrong in drawing how and what you want. What defines REAL artists is not the ability to draw real things. It is the ability to draw, and draw what you like. AND! I am going to hopefully take an anatomy class next year. By the way, I learn by eye. and sometimes it takes me half a year or more to refine things to make it right. Good thing I didn't post one of my full characters... I'm SURE you would have found something wrong with that too... Thanks again. I will be keeping those things in mind. But, since I am the artist, I will use and forget them how I want. If I don't feel like doing it... I won't.

    I'm so glad... There are nicer people out there.

    -Syan
    By nice, you mean "lie to me, i only want the good, so i can live in a bubble and not better myself?"
    Stop being a baby.
    If you dont want an honest critique, dont post, simple.

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    Quote Originally Posted by halflife99
    By nice, you mean "lie to me, i only want the good, so i can live in a bubble and not better myself?"
    Stop being a baby.
    If you dont want an honest critique, dont post, simple.
    No, no. By nice, I mean, dn't completely dis the character that is all. I work very hard. But, most fail to realize it.

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    Kiou

    Um... More recent. Only a week old. Though I like the one of his... "friend" better. Please forgive the upside down crosses. I don't mean to offend any... But, I should be allowed to draw what I wish.
    Oh, by the way... This is all in pen. Because I am weird and draw in that sometimes...



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    Quote Originally Posted by VampireSyan
    What defines REAL artists is not the ability to draw real things. It is the ability to draw, and draw what you like.
    Yes and no. It is the ability to draw well the things you like.
    You are making extremely poor excuses for not being able to draw the exact same character twice in a row and have it look the same.

    You are more than welcome to draw whatever you like, however you like. BUT, if you post your works here, you will be held to the same standards of workmanship as the rest of the members. This is not a fun-time, post your cute semi-elf sketches, Internet bulletin board. This is a site for those artists who, whether self taught, school taught, or not taught at all, wish to improve their skills, not just play "show and tell" of their latest, not very well drawn, kinda elf guy.

    I really do not care if you consider me "nice" or not. I consider you to be a fellow member of this community, which means that if you post your works here, you have to be willing to hear the good with the bad.

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    Quote Originally Posted by madster
    Yes and no. It is the ability to draw well the things you like.
    You are making extremely poor excuses for not being able to draw the exact same character twice in a row and have it look the same.

    You are more than welcome to draw whatever you like, however you like. BUT, if you post your works here, you will be held to the same standards of workmanship as the rest of the members. This is not a fun-time, post your cute semi-elf sketches, Internet bulletin board. This is a site for those artists who, whether self taught, school taught, or not taught at all, wish to improve their skills, not just play "show and tell" of their latest, not very well drawn, kinda elf guy.

    I really do not care if you consider me "nice" or not. I consider you to be a fellow member of this community, which means that if you post your works here, you have to be willing to hear the good with the bad.

    ~M
    The sketch is manga... The top is realism. They will look different. I know that even the chibi of him will not look the same. But, if a person can't make something look EXACTLY the same, does that really define them as bad? I don't think I have ever seen a manga artist that has ever drawn their character exactly the same from frame to frame.

    Not very well drawn? No, I just wanted to let you guys see some of my work. And see if i needed improvement. But, I don't like things pointed out so bluntly... Man, so, if we don't draw constistantly, that means we are horrible and will never amount to anything, correct? Man, my art teacher sure does delude me...

    I don't mind hearing bad, just please understand that I am still learning. I just want people to... understand that. Thanks for the critique really. I will use it. I will try to become perfect, though I have no hope in it. Thanks, really. I needed to see some of my follies. Take care.

    I never understood, why when I tried my hardest, it was never good enough...
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    Quote Originally Posted by VampireSyan
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    I wouldn't know where to start on criting this one unless you tell me specifically what you're looking for in the crits.

    The design look interesting in my opinion.

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    Yup.......You need to know a few things, cause you "have it in ya", but you are getting stuck if you keep the excuses, wish are never good in any case, not only in drawing:

    1- Of cource, no excuses, age is not important, what you are going to do in the future is not important, be honest about some things, saying " i didnt feel like doing it" makes those things to not be there and affect the rest of the pic, and we all know that excuse is the most "invalid" of all, cause we have been there, we dont feel like doing exacly the things we are having problems with.

    2- Study anatomy, dont study anatomy next year....NOW!, time is one of the most important things in the world...dont waste it Study this entire book

    3-Keep it up, dont think in the " artist must do what they want and feel" unless you are to become something besides a "concept artist", because when is your time to work, you will find that is not what you want to draw and how, is the things your client whats you to draw....you can convince sometimes to make somethings a little more on your way, or to be more original, but you will also find clients that love robot designs from 1950 (those that look like tvs with legs and shit )

    4-Why study anatomy and life right away?....because you want to be an artist, you need tu undestand things better than other people, you need to know are things are, how they react, how they look and why, etc.....Once you get that, you can do whatever you like because you will know how to distort reality....just keep in mind you cant distort things you dont know..

    Best of lucks

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    hmm.. honestly... i don't see that much difference between your realism and your manga style. Manga is a(n extreme) stylization of realism. Because of that, you have to learn realistic anatomy first. At this moment it kinda seems as if you're making excuses for not willing to get better by calling it 'style'. A style is only somehting you can work on if you know the foundations.

    Now, the last pic seems like you had fun, but your composition is quite boring. Mostly cos his arms draw me to the sides of the pic, leading to nothing since his hands are cut off. I think there's a tree behind him, but looking down it kinda turns into his waist. Because of this, to me this drawing doesn't make much sense.

    Don't be afraid to use constructionlines or pencil to build the foundations of the pose first, then go over with with a pen and erase the pencil. It'll learn you plan your drawings better and help you improve your art. Try drawing your characters in several poses before working one out and try to draw every day. Use anatomybooks to understand how the body works in theory (go to www.saveloomis.org for great and free help) and draw from life to see how it works in movement. Try drawing your character 100 times and then compare it to the first attempt.

    I'd like to see some of your full drawings. Keep drawing and posting. Don't waste your time on defending your mistakes. Just listen to what others say and try to improve by taking some of their comments into consideration. Sometimes others are right too.

    Hope to see more stuff by you soon.

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    Quote Originally Posted by JERI
    I wouldn't know where to start on criting this one unless you tell me specifically what you're looking for in the crits.

    The design look interesting in my opinion.
    Um, basic body anatomy and the tree palace behind. I am not good with trees, and I need a bit of help with that.^^

    Interesting? Does it look bad? I can't say yes or no, since it is my baby...

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    Quote Originally Posted by Shamagim
    Yup.......You need to know a few things, cause you "have it in ya", but you are getting stuck if you keep the excuses, wish are never good in any case, not only in drawing:

    1- Of cource, no excuses, age is not important, what you are going to do in the future is not important, be honest about some things, saying " i didnt feel like doing it" makes those things to not be there and affect the rest of the pic, and we all know that excuse is the most "invalid" of all, cause we have been there, we dont feel like doing exacly the things we are having problems with.

    2- Study anatomy, dont study anatomy next year....NOW!, time is one of the most important things in the world...dont waste it Study this entire book

    3-Keep it up, dont think in the " artist must do what they want and feel" unless you are to become something besides a "concept artist", because when is your time to work, you will find that is not what you want to draw and how, is the things your client whats you to draw....you can convince sometimes to make somethings a little more on your way, or to be more original, but you will also find clients that love robot designs from 1950 (those that look like tvs with legs and shit )

    4-Why study anatomy and life right away?....because you want to be an artist, you need tu undestand things better than other people, you need to know are things are, how they react, how they look and why, etc.....Once you get that, you can do whatever you like because you will know how to distort reality....just keep in mind you cant distort things you dont know..

    Best of lucks

    Hehe... you're right. I can be quite weak minded at times. That's the bad part of me. ^^; Fprgive me for getting so bent out of shape down there. And thanks.

    Yeah, I am going to try doing more still lifes. Or at least draw from life. I don't like still lifes quite as much.

    XD Thanks for the link. I will save it. My library card died, so I can't go to the library to get anatomy books. And, well, I don't go into my school library enough. I am quite sure this will help my... incredibly bad points. And help me to remember how to draw girls as well. Thanks again.^^

    Yeah, I have found that when taking commissions, it isn't what I WANT to do. But, they usually help me get better. Bit by bit. Art class has also taught me that I don't always get to draw what I want. Thanks for the reminder. I need a "gentle" conk on the head every once in a while.

    Okay, um... Hehe. I will try to further my studies in that area. I often study people while I am at school and such. I just want to get better. Sometimes it is very difficult though. Thanks for all the nice help and critiques, I will keep them in mind.^^

    -Syan-

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