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    Yearning

    Hello all

    I am starting this painting, but before I commit I want the drawing and color composition to pass the CA test.

    Please point out any anatomical mistakes, and basically anything you would change or add. It is heavily influenced by Mucha

    Thank you

    Yearning

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    I like the sketch a lot. i l really like your style. I won’t comment on the coloring one just yet other then the fact that the sunlight hasn’t been applied to the piece but I assume you’ll take care of that soon. Also the man's right arm (his left) looks shorter than the left arm. I know you meant for it to be foreshortened but it doesn’t look the same size as the other arm. It’s a little distracting. Great lines and great charter development. I would add some more design in the clothing because it may be a bit boring the way it is. And last, I think the bird’s right wing isn’t at the right angle. It makes the bird look alittle flat. Other than that it’s really great and I definitely would like to see it finished. Keep posting this piece.

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    what's up parker?

    first thing i noticed is that his right bicep looks a little weird. kind of puffy. i think it would look better if you slimmed that, and his neck, down a little.

    as for the colors, i think i need to see more to see where you're going with it. i'd say that having the sky the same color as the belt and clasp doesn't work well. the color scheme is a bit simple, i think there's room in there for more contrast.

    Hey dog. . . . did you see the size of that chicken?!
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    thanks for the comments guys. I will change the birds wing, the man's forshortened arm, slim down his neck, and make the sky more white than yellow. I'll make his clothes more interesting too.

    Also, I just noticed this myself, but the layout & composition is slanted to the left like it's going to fall over. I can change the horizon line to correct that.

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    You should get a referince for the (his right, our left) arm. Just google arm or something, or look in the reference forum. It just needs a few tweaks.

    Other than that, lookin good.

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    I definately agree with the comments regarding the small left arm (his left) and the puffiness of the musculature (see Prom's tutorial). With regard to the design, it looks like you're going for a more tender feel and the girl's position is... let's say indelicate. Touching the face or hair is very good, but unless you're going for sensual, you might want to limit the underarm shots. His stance looks rather stiff, as well, like he's smuggling corn cobs. I would recommend standing in front of a mirror and working the poses out. Get into the character and overact; it helps a lot.

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    I made the corrections that you all suggested. Thanks.

    As for the ladies indelicate pose, that's something I'll have to remeber for next time.

    Here's the lastest update. Thanks all for your critiques. They were really helpful.

    Yearning

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    looking good, parker.

    always nice to see critiques taken to heart.

    keep up the good work. see you at sketch night.

    Hey dog. . . . did you see the size of that chicken?!
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    Having a hard to putting in a good highlight color. None of the usual flesh tones are working. He looks like a manaquin. Should I change the shadow color?

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