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    Any constructive criticism or comments would be greatly appreciated.. Dawn of Consciousness

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    very original and very detailed

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    I feel like my eye never rests on anything, and as a result doesn't ever flow through the image.... What I mean is, when someone first glances at the painting, you would want to "catch" them with a really bold image, which will pull them in and then they will want to discover and search through the rest. this could maybe be fixed by pulling out a few of the objects more (I am thinking the figure on the right, or, as seems to be your intent, the eye/world- darken around the iris to make the iris/ pupil pop?.) These are just my thoughts, keep in mind, so take them for whatever you want. The image itself is amazing with all of the imagery/ narrative/ symbolism, but IMO "catching" the viewer will make it an even more effective painting.

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    Thanks for the feedback so far. Kent- cheers for the constructive criticism. when you say pulling out , im not quite sure what you mean. do you mean leaving out completely or bringing it more to the forefront? thanks for the advice on having one main feature. i didnt want it to be the eye in this piece as its a bit of a cliche in art but nothing does stand out in particular i think my next piece may suffer the same fate of not having a main object although im aiming to make it less crowded and have bits of the piece untouched. its just a bit of an addiction ive got to fill every milimetre- a virus almost. i reckon i can tame myself in my next piece tho.

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    At first sight, it slightly reminded me of Dali, in a very crowded, colorful way.

    I mostly agree with Kent: it does need something to pop out. However my eye was drawn into it by the colorful wealth of it.

    Nice work! Honestly I don't know how people like you come up with such original ideas.

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