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Hi all, looks like Iíve finally got around to creating my own thread.
So come on crit away you know you want to
Hereís some life drawing to kick off
Last edited by RES; March 11th, 2009 at 11:08 AM.
Hey, Ryan, nice to see some work from you!
Here's some crits from me: remember to keep the light side and the dark side separate. Nothing in the light side should get as dark as anything in the dark side. And the opposite is true as well--nothing in the dark side should get as light as anything in the light side.
Look at your first drawing. You have drawn some dark spots in the light side of the figure. I'm specifically looking at the upper left-side shoulder area. Instead of giving the body form, these dark spots tend to punch "holes" into the figure. Keep them a little lighter and they won't break up the figure.
Also, look at your last drawing. The dark spots seem to be all over the place, so that it's hard to tell exactly where the light source is.
I like the dark shading you put behind the man's head in the 2nd pic. It pops his head out nicely. He has an interesting character, which is fun to see.
The 3rd pic is the most solid to me. You've done a better job of defining the light and dark sides, and her body feels more 3-D because of it.
Keep it up and post more work!
Your loose shading technique has got potential IMO.
The thing i have to argue about are the mis-proportion in your sketches,
take time to check the proportion at the earlier stage of work.
Maybe work with simple shapes for easyness,firstly.
Wotcha Res. Nice stuff, definitely. What Emmy Gee was talking about is right - you need to learn the power of squiiiiintiiiing. Best way to check the values.
The deal with the proportions isn't really an issue, I don't think. The only pic I can see with real issues is the bottom one with the woman. I think the cause behind this is a common issue people have where the angle at which you are to the paper and the way the figure is cropped skew how you see it. It gets wider and bigger the closer it gets to the bottom of the page, which probably means one of a couple things: 1. you didn't do it on an easel; 2. you did do it on an easel but it was too low and your vision was skewed 3. you just didn't stand back and look at it enough.
the only ways to fix this issue are to be really fastidious about comparing body parts (are her breasts as big as her head for instance) and alignment, and about standing back as often as possible.
But like I say, I don't think it's a general proportion problem, I think it's just being methodical about checking.
Anyway, I haven't seen anything else except mr Pants, and the excellent angels you came up with for the thunderdome in San Fran. You should post that, I reckon.
Oh, I got my screen fixed, by the way. Cheers for that!
Welcome to CA!
Good life drawings, how long were those poses? I agree with dirty_c, only real proportional issue is the last piece.
As for the third piece, I agree with emily g, very good work with making it look 3 dimensional.
Keep drawing and post some more! Looking forward to your 2nd update.
Hey Ryan, these are pretty cool!
Most crits covered already... some of their faces seem a little alien-ish to me, you seem to go overboard on the forehead a fair bit...
Nice shading technique though, fast yet neat.
Post Mr. Pants so we can tell you the proportions and lighting are wrong
Great stuff. My main crit is the head proportions. The first and the last pic mainly. In the last pic, it looks like her eyes, nose, mouth have been squashed in to the face area. Same with the first, but in profile.
I'd suggest trying to be a little loose with your pencil and try not to go over lines you have already made, it makes the outline of the figure look messy, and hard to read; and if its hard for you to read where your lines are going, the proportions will suffer.
(do some self potraits!?!)
Please keep posting mate...
First off thanks for everyone who looked at the thread and particularly the ones who posted
Emily g -The third piece is my most favourite, the pieces are in chronological order so by the third one I felt I was improving but the forth one just went wrong, hopefully I can get back on track.
Xaya and Icey- Youíve found my Achilles healÖproportion. My main problem is Iím not a patient drawer. Iím normally all about the energy but Iím try to tighten up at the moment
Dirty c- What are you Sherlock Holmes! Youíre absolutely correct I didnít use an easel I was drawing it on my lap
IanE- The sessions where these pieces were drawn are about two hours but I normally produce a few pieces in that time and I never normally time myself, Iíll try to in future, it could be interesting to see if I get quicker
MoP- I always get the alien comment or sometimes skull like, as I tend to over exaggerate eye sockets
Molly- I never normally draw faces in life drawing so these pieces have been interesting to produce. Iím not sure the internets ready for a selfpotraits of my grisly Adams face at the moment but I think Iím going to have to start doing them soon to help with my face proportions.
IllustriousHarry- Glad you liked my cross hatching as Iíve been working on it to help give a more 3D look
And finally by popular request (just Dirty C) my San Francisco Thunderdome entry for the Angel theme.
The piece is called the midnight angel club. So thereís the piece, get the crit sticks out
Good stuff here - your shading has a ton of vibrancy to it. And those angels in their little tutus are quite, quite scary.
Post some mo'!
BTW, I said 'purplemonkeydishwasher' to Jake and he flipped me the bird! What an uncouth young man.
good to see your sketchbook is underway!!
i like your angels!
I have just this second started mine.... need to get my camera up and running so that i can get my bigger images up...
ah well i shall see you tomorrow old chap for more titilation in newton solney... i must admit that my purple monkey is taking me longer than it ought to: i havent finished the flats yet!!
>>oishiiniku. flipped you the bird? , how rude, you were asking for it: i've told you to leave my mother alone time and time again you sick feck <<
nice drawings you got there mate.
I love the rendering in the last of the lifedrawings .
Cant really crit, your stuff is nice. Looking forward to see some more!
Hi all I havenít posted for a while so hereís a new update of life drawing.
The first 5 pieces are 5 min studies with a brush pen the last piece took about 50 mins, I took my time with it as I am trying to work on my proportions.
so what do you think crit away.
these drawings are lovely, you have great energy in your line: things are starting to come together for you: the proportions are improving and you are starting to recapture your own style.
i think these are some of the most intersting drawings youve done.
the images are small on the web tho: these were pretty big drawings!
the fourth one is excellent!!!!!!
see you soon mate!
we didnt draw at the zoo: just looked at the anmials: it was half fun/ half depressing! - some of them really need more space
the monkeys were brillint tho. gibbons rule!
Nice one, mate. The line you're using is really nice - like the fact that you're exploring such different methods. People seem to get easily locked into one style, so it's nice to see you challenging that. Also got to agree, they have really great energy and you're capturing the form nicely - implying a lot of the masses - though you could even be a bit more conservative and let the imagination speak for itself a little.
Hi all I've been with out my digital camera for a while a but I've finally got it back so there should be some new life draw going up in a bit,
but in the mean time hereís a pic I'm working on for this weeks C.O.W
Nice stuff! Haven't seen your SB before. Favourite is the scary little angels.. Nice rendering
Keep 'em coming!
Like a phoenix from the ashs Iíve decided to resurrect this thread
First things first
Dirty_C/ Thanks chap if you look below you can see I did finish this peace I kept the background simple, as itís a COW
Dcept/ thanks for stopping by come again any time.
Badger/ Hello chap nice to see you in Prague, I donít know if Iíve still got those charcoals as I did have any fix at the time so they got really smudged on the way home but I have a root around and see if I can find them.
Tie/ Hi thanks for the crit and yes they are a bit uglyÖ.He He He
Cakeypigdog/ See see Iím updating you can stop bugging me know. OK its just digital at the moment but life drawings next to come. Thanks for the push mate.
I know Itís a bit late but a least Iíve replied in the end. Anyway here a few COWs I never posted in here and a horse skull study. Iíll post some life drawing soon I promise.
Evil Supply Creature
Big sea monster
Nice progresss, dude. Love the horse skull, definitely. I see you're really pushing the textural angle lately, which is working well.
If I were to suggest one thing, it's with the COWs. I'd like to see a bit more colour painted into the dark sides of the forms. They're looking a little 'too' black there.
Great to see you pushing along. Post more.
Very nice stuff, Ryan - I like your bloody snow-beast. Those freaky angels are fun, too. And a little disturbing. In a good way.
these cows are amazing man, really liking the polar carnivore thing. looking forward to duke it out with you and Dirty_c in the td. great looking lifedrawings too