Here's some crits from me: remember to keep the light side and the dark side separate. Nothing in the light side should get as dark as anything in the dark side. And the opposite is true as well--nothing in the dark side should get as light as anything in the light side.
Look at your first drawing. You have drawn some dark spots in the light side of the figure. I'm specifically looking at the upper left-side shoulder area. Instead of giving the body form, these dark spots tend to punch "holes" into the figure. Keep them a little lighter and they won't break up the figure.
Also, look at your last drawing. The dark spots seem to be all over the place, so that it's hard to tell exactly where the light source is.
I like the dark shading you put behind the man's head in the 2nd pic. It pops his head out nicely. He has an interesting character, which is fun to see.
The 3rd pic is the most solid to me. You've done a better job of defining the light and dark sides, and her body feels more 3-D because of it.
Wotcha Res. Nice stuff, definitely. What Emmy Gee was talking about is right - you need to learn the power of squiiiiintiiiing. Best way to check the values.
The deal with the proportions isn't really an issue, I don't think. The only pic I can see with real issues is the bottom one with the woman. I think the cause behind this is a common issue people have where the angle at which you are to the paper and the way the figure is cropped skew how you see it. It gets wider and bigger the closer it gets to the bottom of the page, which probably means one of a couple things: 1. you didn't do it on an easel; 2. you did do it on an easel but it was too low and your vision was skewed 3. you just didn't stand back and look at it enough.
the only ways to fix this issue are to be really fastidious about comparing body parts (are her breasts as big as her head for instance) and alignment, and about standing back as often as possible.
But like I say, I don't think it's a general proportion problem, I think it's just being methodical about checking.
Anyway, I haven't seen anything else except mr Pants, and the excellent angels you came up with for the thunderdome in San Fran. You should post that, I reckon.
Oh, I got my screen fixed, by the way. Cheers for that!
Great stuff. My main crit is the head proportions. The first and the last pic mainly. In the last pic, it looks like her eyes, nose, mouth have been squashed in to the face area. Same with the first, but in profile.
I'd suggest trying to be a little loose with your pencil and try not to go over lines you have already made, it makes the outline of the figure look messy, and hard to read; and if its hard for you to read where your lines are going, the proportions will suffer.
(do some self potraits!?!)
First off thanks for everyone who looked at the thread and particularly the ones who posted
Emily g -The third piece is my most favourite, the pieces are in chronological order so by the third one I felt I was improving but the forth one just went wrong, hopefully I can get back on track.
Xaya and Icey- You’ve found my Achilles heal…proportion. My main problem is I’m not a patient drawer. I’m normally all about the energy but I’m try to tighten up at the moment
Dirty c- What are you Sherlock Holmes! You’re absolutely correct I didn’t use an easel I was drawing it on my lap
IanE- The sessions where these pieces were drawn are about two hours but I normally produce a few pieces in that time and I never normally time myself, I’ll try to in future, it could be interesting to see if I get quicker
MoP- I always get the alien comment or sometimes skull like, as I tend to over exaggerate eye sockets
Molly- I never normally draw faces in life drawing so these pieces have been interesting to produce. I’m not sure the internets ready for a selfpotraits of my grisly Adams face at the moment but I think I’m going to have to start doing them soon to help with my face proportions.
IllustriousHarry- Glad you liked my cross hatching as I’ve been working on it to help give a more 3D look
And finally by popular request (just Dirty C) my San Francisco Thunderdome entry for the Angel theme.
The piece is called the midnight angel club. So there’s the piece, get the crit sticks out