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    hi, i am new here, pls give some comments on my drawings.

    hi, i am new here, pls give some comments on my drawings.
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    make it smaller so I can see everything at once!
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    its a great looking piece, but a little boring maybe.
    whats the story? not that every piece needs some elaborate story.
    but little things (like if she had fish bowls all over her apartment) would add a real interest, and give her a gaze a focal point.
    right now, you telling me that she is aquatic, but not elaborating on how/why she is sitting in a recliner is a bit of a tease.
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    Your rendering of the leather sofa is convincing.

    I have a feeling that the shadows have not been worked out accurately. Same for the highlights on her.
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    Not to bad overall...

    Her anatomy is a bit funky, and her neck is too skinny. The overall design lacks, and like DSillustration said, its a little boring. You've given her a very very generic design, with no points of interest.

    Where do you want us to look? Where is your point of emphasis? You gotta think about those kind of things when doing these sketches.

    You've got a great light source in the painting, and some awesome foreshortening/perspective in the character, so kudo's for that. Keep up the good work man, I'd love to see more.
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    Red face

    thank you all for the comments!will get on improving it ASAP.
    DSillustration-you are right, i did not think of the focusing point, was just thinking of forms and colors and lighting all the time. will visualize the big picture before starting another artwork. have looked on your artworks, hope i can do as well as you.


    here some others proggressing works.Hope to here more comments from you guys!!!

    hi, i am new here, pls give some comments on my drawings.
    hi, i am new here, pls give some comments on my drawings.
    hi, i am new here, pls give some comments on my drawings.
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    this is the improved drawing of the blue fish girl based on the comments by you all, hope to hear more comments and learn more techniques to make it look better.
    hi, i am new here, pls give some comments on my drawings.
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    nice man, the background is much better to look at than just the girl and the chair alone. the only thing that is really bothering me at this point is the perspective. Especially the floor, but i'm sure you've already noticed that yourself. But learn from the mistake and move on, right?

    I really like the fish tank and the features you've added to the room, its really interesting, keep up the work.
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    hi mping,

    great to have you sharing your art here.
    about the blue fish girl, it's interesting that you have an aquarium and a big 'nemo' fish. she's living in an underground sewer from the looks of it.

    what i think to imrove is the floor where she's sitting. Those pink patches doesn't seem to blend to the sewer background. perhaps you can illustrate a wet sewer surface, a little bit dirty, muddy.

    If you are trying to present a twist in the story, whereby she lives in a clean, well furnished dwelling place eventhough she's in a sewer, and she's got a carpet in her living room, you can blur the pink patches a bit, to make it look more like a carpet.


    keep up the good works!!
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    improved a little bit.how?
    hi, i am new here, pls give some comments on my drawings.
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    sodomizer-thanks for the encouragement. did some changes on the chair.hope that cures the perspective problem.got any comments for the other drawings of mine?
    RIClim: thanks for the ideas. good suggestion which give FUNS in drawwing!!
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    That's much better, putting in a context - good work. The chair though, is still floating rather than sitting convincingly on the carpet. The perspective on the little table with the aquarium on it is not quite right - the ellipse of the base of it isn't the same as the ellipse of the top.

    On the other drawings - the bat-looking man - his head's way too small for that body. I'm cracking up on the guy with the mountain range behind him because he looks either like he's doing a nutty little jig or he's stepping on bugs.

    The legs of the girl on the green chair aren't working. The extended one almost is, although it really lacks grace, the way you have her toes pointed up rather than planting the foot on the ground. The bent one, the foreshortening isn't working right. Her leg looks almost broken, the way it's moving out from her pelvis at that angle, and lying so flat on the couch.

    Good job taking critiques and using them to improve your work! I look forward to seeing more from you.
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    I like the style of your pieces. As a little idea for your blue fish girl piece, why not have some land creature as her pet? (thus having the tank full of air rather than water)

    Like I said, I like your stuff, it's got a certain flowing style to it. I would like to see more, maybe some sketches.
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