Well the first thing I noticed it the horizon line is a little high for the perspective you drew the women at...the only other really glaring thing that stood out was the right forearm of the girl ontop, seems a little long, and isn't the same width as the other...
Oh, and I really can't tell what's going on (obviously she is sitting ontop of a defeated(?) supergirl but whats she doing)
keep at it, it's just a rough I know...
Like Shatterdome i can't really understand what the girl on top is doing.
Crits: The girl on top has a really short upperbody. You made room for her ribs, so at least she can breathe, but there's no room for her intestines or her pelvis. Her lower arms seem longer than the upperarms and her head is too big for her body. The legs seem too short. The girl down looks better both proportionally and forshortened.
You could get a more dynamic or dramatic angle while drawing these two. Atm there's too much negative space around both characters. Perhaps it's an idea for the future to do several thumbnailsketches, before you start sketching and coloring.
Yeah I'm gonna do something different .. the composition is lacking ... have to make it make more sense too
But thanks for the advice guys
Id suggest drawing out the position of the females on paper before doing it digitally. The line work is very sketchy and you've jumped in on color before the image actually makes sense. The female ontop is making a gesture like 'Oh, ok' , instead of what I think you may have been after is 'Right, shes dead, I win'
I suggest you go and do a few sketches first of the female ontop, her hair and cape especially could use some attention. You got some movement goin on there, but it doest really show. Maybe have some hair flickering across her forehead, her cape loose in the wind. (Theres some cool drapery tutorials in the (believe it or not) 'Tutorial' Section by Mr Fredflickstone.) The expression on her face is a little plain. Drop the angle of her face down more, and her eyes looking up, to make it more sinister, then that would compensate for the gesture in her arms. Give her mouth a snear/cheeky smile, as if to say 'Yeah, I beat the bitch' haha
Keep at it geeza, the proprtions are cool - ooh, work on the hands too luv - too square, round em off!
they look like two super-cheerleaders in a mud pit!
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Supergirl on the bottom looks cool from what I can tell. But the one mounting her has some pretty epic facial features. Meaning her nose and mouth are too large. That and the arm / hand position for her is a bit obscure, she should look tired and beat up from an intense fight.
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well, let's be honest, who doesn't like that idea?.... waitasec... I think I just unconciously parroted that Miller Lite commercial....oh well, keep it up, work at it some more!Originally Posted by Ive
still really rough but please feel free to crit to your hearts content
It really depends what you're trying to communicate. Iin the first one the physical clash was very obvious. This one looks like they could be having an argument. If that's where you're headed with it, then so far so good - but you need something to tie them together, maybe a background.
the background and "effects" will make it a little clearer... one supergirl has just sshot past the other who moved out of the way quickly... i'll be able to show it better when I get round to doing the capes and hair properly and also some "effects"
Task yourself to make six small thumbnails, each giving a rough indication of the values for the figures and the background. Pick different camera angles and poses to really flesh out which part of the story you want us to see.