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    A short, short illustrated story, some NUDITY!

    Here six pics and an attemt to a mini (horror, humor, sick?) story

    http://www.pixelpaintings.net/maldonado.htm

    Sebastian Marquez

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    Hi there,

    well, thats some wierd story, indeed. You could make a short movie out of it. Kinda reminds me of the film "Hable con ella" ("talk to her"): Two men share an odd friendship while they care for their girls who are both in deep comas. One of 'em is a male nurse and makes his girl-patient (she's not his girlfriend)pregnant while she's in coma. He goes to jail for it but the girl wakes up in pregnancy (she wakes up because a new life grows in her and so does her new life after coma begin). So paradoxically he kinda raped her but actually woke her up by doing so. A very good movie, great scipt.
    Well, and in your story there's also a girl raped and made pregnant but with a different storyline around it.
    You could actually write it to a screenplay, ever thoght of it?
    There's also some "Edward Muncish"-Style to your pics... e.g."the scream".

    But... why is this guy so discusting? Didn't get that!

    Anyway, keep up!

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    man, that main character IS a pervert rapist... are we supposed to be happy for him?

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    Ok, you obviously have some talent, though i don't really like this style at all, a few things were done well (in my opinion) PLZ note, im not trying to be rude.


    In the first one, the canister in the front of the image is rendered pretty well.

    In the fourth one, the woman in the front is done really well. i love the style on that, in my opinion, you should've done the entire story in that style.

    in the fifth one, the tube is done well, and the body, is pretty good, a few anatomy issues here and there (her right breast is a little bigger than the lef... ok... a lot bigger) but still is pretty good.

    And in the last one the cell phone is done quite well too.

    The things i pointed out do not seem to fit within the majority of the style you were trying. When it comes to style, I believe that consistency is key. Good work though.

    And the story = too cliche not very well written.


    And jesus, try posting something intelligent... we all know you can read, so you must be able to post something a little better then that...

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    That is.. something. The good. You seem to know color pretty well.
    but please lay off the smudge tool. And you need a balance from wacky / proper proportions and such. I know the style is supposed to be as unsettlign as the story, but at times it just feels wiggity whack. And last... doy ou need a hug?

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    thanks for crits and all..!

    Hi, thanks for all your comments, and your time!
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    Quote Originally Posted by McKack
    Looks like you've raped your images with the mighty smudge tool or something...
    LOL!

    yeah, youve got some style dude, and your compisition is pretty good too. i would lighten up on the smudgy though

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    Kinda twisted, and I wonder if he ended up killiing himself? Well, we can only assume.

    As for critique no problems, except for a few spelling errors. I bet it will add to credibility to your work if you correct them. And as for your style, it is very unique and i'll spare the descriptions, but it makes a lot more sense to me after experiencing the punchline of your story. Good job, do more.

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