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    Please critique

    Hi guys. I'd really appreciate if you could tell me what seems off to you.
    I also struggle with figuring out what the water should look like, any tips on that? Tried to use some references but still not getting it
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    the steps need to be drawn in correct perspective, decide where the light source is and make sure the shadows correspond to it properly. From the point of view you have the water should reflect the tree and steps, again this is a matter of proper perspective.

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    The water and the sky are very similar in hue, which makes it feel as though we might be looking into a crack over space. Water is translucent - what is below the surface? We should at least be able to see some suggestion of the edges of the pool extending below the surface of the water.

    It's a cute idea, keep going! Introduce some more textures to the wood and moss, and decide on a time of day to work with. Where is the light coming from? Is it mystical, moonlight, morning, or midday? Also, the edges of the pool are quite sharp and angular, is there a reason for this? It brings to mind a river or brook but there seems to be no current on the water.

    Just thoughts, good luck!
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    Decide if your colors are going to be cool or warm and stick with it. Using drastically opposing colors like neon red and green will make it impossible to mix your colors properly and it gives everything a cartoon feel. Also, I'd add some negative space to the other side of that tree and add some indication of your horizon line. Your tree seems to be floating apart from the background. Additionally, that's some really weird tree...anatomy.
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    I mean, would it be so bad if all anyone remembers about me is that I was a lover of art, of women, and wine? Perhaps I reach too far.

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    Guys thank you for your feedback, it helped a lot.
    Here is the correction, I hope it's slightly better.
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    We shouldn't be seeing the tops of the steps in the reflection.
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    I mean, would it be so bad if all anyone remembers about me is that I was a lover of art, of women, and wine? Perhaps I reach too far.

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    I think it's a big improvement We're getting a much better sense of space and mood in this version. The added natural elements, especially the new mushroom, create a much more interesting composition.

    The rounded shape and the reflections make a big difference in selling to the eye that we're looking at still water.

    Great job!
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    @David_a_ray I don't quite understand, can you please explain why?
    @mangosalsa thank youuuu :3 glad you like it.

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    I'd recommend looking up how to draw reflections in perspective. Additionally, take a simple object like a cup or a tissue box (cylinder or cube) and put it so the bottom is touching a mirror. Can you see the top of the actual object? Can you see the top of the object in the reflection? If you keep the object as is, but change your vantage point, is there any time that you'll be able to see the top of the object in the mirror? If you have stairs in your home and a mirror that's movable. Put the mirror at the base of the stairs. Can you see the top of the stairs in the mirror?

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