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    Ava the wanderer (In need of critique)

    I took a mentorship this summer and it has been a month ever since then. I'm currently trying to clean this character up for presentation. Any honest critiques welcome!Name:  olabode-alaka-ava-finished.jpg
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    I dig it.. though a few things stand out.


    Top image - full figure.. seems wierdly lit... from the top, front, and back? Definitely obscuring good things like her face.


    That knife edge looks to be going a different way from the handle


    The right hand looks way blocky.


    Top left image- I don't get the black hair-ear things jammed on there.


    the pants look jammed in on there, and when I am trying to guess'timate her proportions they seem quite more low than they should be.
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    Quote Originally Posted by modi123 View Post
    I dig it.. though a few things stand out.


    Top image - full figure.. seems wierdly lit... from the top, front, and back? Definitely obscuring good things like her face.


    That knife edge looks to be going a different way from the handle


    The right hand looks way blocky.


    Top left image- I don't get the black hair-ear things jammed on there.


    the pants look jammed in on there, and when I am trying to guess'timate her proportions they seem quite more low than they should be.
    thanks for the feedback! I was definitely having a problem with the proportions and the baggy pants. They weren't really working together! ill have to go back in fix those areas.

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    Your characters quirks needs to be better defined, the best way to do this is to copy from real life references. Overall, you have some strong character design there, you just need an extra pushing on the material lighting.

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