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    So... I've been commissioned to do an illustrated children's book

    It's a very short book and the story is very simple... but I'd like to bring up the highest quality work I can... So It can be one of my top works in my curriculum and portolio...

    sad part is that I understand little about composition.

    here's what I got so far...


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    First, how will these be formatted inside the book and how will the text interact with the images? Be more clear with what you want with this critique. What are these characters doing, what mood are you trying to convey?

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    I like the style you're going for, but I don't think there's much of a structure underneath. The characters have some awkward proportions -- Delila's arms in the first image are different lengths, for example -- and the dresses look pasted on. Maybe build your characters using simple shapes like spheres and boxes before you add details on top; they'll look more consistent that way. Also, the perspective is way off; nothing leads towards a vanishing point. Maybe wonky perspective is what you were going for, which is perfectly okay, but the wonkiness doesn't really look like a deliberate choice. Lastly, the expressions and poses aren't clearly readable. Exaggerating the poses and studying facial anatomy might help, even for really stylized characters like these. I hope my wall of text helps you out, and good luck!

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    Oh those characters are wearing dresses, I thought they were flared pants

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    thanks, guys, I'll work this stuff out. =)

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    Also colour inside the lines already.

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    To add to what AJams said, If you're going to have prominent line art, don't dodge or add overlay layers over it. It looks horrible. Make sure the line art layer is on top.

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