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    Hm, I tried but as u can see...To mention or show only some of my issues I stuck with, I have trouble indicating cast shadow, form definition , values...and anatomy...critique and especially help is very welcome. Peace ya'
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    Off the bat - which Earth is superman with multiple chins?


    Something is wonky with the eyes.. like the far left one seems bigger than the 'closer' right one.


    Also that far left side of the face seems to be one slab when the right side shows contour and depth.
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    I'd erase those neck wrinkles pronto. Number one: they're ugly. Number two: they don't help to describe the overall form of his neck in a way that makes any sense. I'd focus more on the sternocleidomastoid and the trapezius muscles than on superficial surface details. You've almost conceptualized the neck as a block form, but it just falls apart with those damn wrinkles. Also, you've got some pretty awful proportions just in general. And that light above his nearest eyebrow completely destroys any illusion of form his eye socket may have had. Actually, it's because the eyebrow is too low. I'm beginning to think you drew this while referencing someone else's work because there are some more advanced areas like the way the nose, chin and overall shape of the neck is lit that show a much higher skill level than what you currently seem to posses. It's a very odd thing to look at.

    Jesus, I'm re-reading all of that. I'm pulling no punches today it seems. Please, know that I'm not saying you're a terrible artist or that this drawing is without any merit. Basically, I'm just saying you've done pretty well copying some parts, but you've missed a few spots and it confused me to see a mixture of more advanced skill and novice mistakes.
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    @david_a_ray - stop drinking out of my well!
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    Hm...first. Thx for the feedback. It helped me a lot. Well, its done from photo ref. so, no copy of any other artist. Just a study...Peace
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    Lets see the photo

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    Quote Originally Posted by Chris Fraser View Post
    Lets see the photo
    Here it is buddy. I changed it to bw.
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    I should have spend more time to it before posting. But sometimes I feel like, ok maybe some skillo guys could give me some master tips. Sadly it's not working so...
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    Yeah, thought it looked a bit Alex Ross.

    I'd say: wot David said. Also, go a bit lighter on the charcoal, chief.
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    ...which is only my opinion.
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