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    out of comfort zone

    Hi!!
    I'm going totally out of my comfort zone with this...never done something similar before, so I'm not really objective.
    I would love to have some feedback especially on the human figures and if it's possible -and how- to push it further. It's not completely finished.
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    I dig it! If htis is your first foray out of your zone kudos. The tortoise size, feathering, texturing, and horn go well when exploring options from a basic tortoise.


    A few areas to watch out.. that lifted leg looks like it has a wonky join at the body.
    The undershell (right) could use some deteail.


    The red lady's leg looks wonky where the kid is holding it. Like the foot should be pointed out towards the bottom more.. like 90 degrees clockwise and almost straight down.


    The lighting gets a little spotty by say the raised leg highlight and the lower leaf by it (or the mouth), but not a biggie right now.


    Though looking at it I am wondering what a plant eater's canines would be used for.. Ha!
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    Thank you Modi!
    the canines are clearly for eat the children
    I tried to follow your feedback and to work more on legs...as i saw from ref tortoise have kind of wonky legs. Anyway hope that now is less disturbing.
    I wanted to push it a bit more...dunno.
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    Nice!

    I can't add too much. The thing I'm looking at most is the feather fan and how it functions. How does it attach? Does it raise and lower? What happens to it if this tortoise can retract it's neck like a real-life example?

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    Though looking at it I am wondering what a plant eater's canines would be used for.. Ha!
    Same thing as always: bitin' things!

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    as i saw from ref tortoise have kind of wonky legs.
    True.
    ...which is only my opinion.
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    The feather fun should function like a peacock fan without closing: it will low down and lean (beautifully) against the shell. It will make the same when the tortoise retract the neck. I have to study more how peacock fan are attached to the body and how to adapt it to my idea.
    Edit: I forgot to say that the fan is attached to the shell edge

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    Pretty nice job! I like the initial idea of the scene. I wouldn't pick on you for individual anatomical mistakes and similar things that have been mentioned before, but my advice would be to next time pay attention more on how to arrange the composition. The pyramid method works well here as you've started it, but the composition of the overall scene is kind of unbalanced. Beside that, try to not give the same amount of attention to everything. The tree with the coconuts, it doesn't need as much attention as you've given it. Not just that, but the red coconuts pull the attention without any purpose. Be very careful with complimentary colors in general, they can make a mess sometimes.

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    Cool idea. It reminds me a lot of James Gurney's Dinotopia. I suggest checking that out if you hadn't yet.

    So, its kind of a weird thing, but I sort of prefer the feeling of the first image. Its less saturated and I like the foliage in the background a bit more... Maybe just a personal thing I guess.

    As for the turtle guy himself, I feel like something is lost from the neck connection with his body and his right (our left) leg. That connection there looks awkward. It sort of just looks like a big hole at the moment.

    Definitely digging the idea overall. Looking forward to see it further along.

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    The second version was just an experiment...I think I like the first more too.
    About the hole....The big tortoise have such a thing...probably I didn't render it well and look like a mistake...In the sketch was looking better!
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    Try to push that fruit on back ground more by graying and cooling it down as its takes too much focus, also try to get proper ellipses in perspective there as well for feet

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    Quote Originally Posted by ctool View Post
    Edit: I forgot to say that the fan is attached to the shell edge
    Ahh... then it was my mistake to assume it was attached to the neck.
    ...which is only my opinion.
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