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    Reviews for improving this art

    Hello, again here to ask your suggestions before jumping to the final step in this fanart, could I improve anything in the art, any changes that could be made that would improve the art?


    What do you think?

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    I know that it's too late to change it now, but I'm gonna mention it for future references, the pose looks quite awkward, and is probably part of the reason it's hard to tell what's going on.

    But i'm getting ahead of myself here, it is a bit hard to see whats going on at first. I think this piece could do with some more contrast, and a better established light source. Assuming that blue ball is the light source, and how bright it seems to be glowing, the light on Ahri could do with being just a bit brighter. It will draw the viewer's eye more, and it will make it easier to see whats going on. Right now all the values are close together, which you can see when you turn the image grayscale. I did a quick paintover to show what I mean, and I still thin I could've pushed the light and dark contrast a bit more.

    Overall though, the piece is coming together quite nice.

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    I understood about the values, you really are right.
    About the pose of the character I worked on and above this reference.

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    I don't understand the white cloud around back, or it's distance from this gal.

    I am not following what the character is embedded in either.
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    I believe those are tails. The character is Ahri, from LoL i believe, and she has multiple tails, so they will be close behind her i assume?

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    Yes, that's exactly it, it's the tails she has.

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    While the face is quite nicely rendered, the pose just isn't working :/
    Your reference is awkward for a couple of reasons, which makes the anatomy even more difficult to cross-reference. There's a lens-tilt happening that's forcing perspective on the body (probably done in post), and most of her body is truncated by water. It's a very pretty pose in the photo, but because the shoulder and the pelvic girdle isn't skewed quite right, and the proportions are squashed in your drawing, it makes her look broken and pained...
    My recommendation to you, as harsh as it might sound, is to salvage that nicely drawn face by turning the pose vertical, losing the prone pose, and redrawing a pose that feels natural.
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    I totally agree with you, I'm trying to fix this anatomy for days, I made some modifications even more I feel a discomfort when turning horizontally.

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    Maybe try to define better what's going on with her right arm (value variation) and drawing a bit of her body that is submerged. We can see those two aspects clearly on the reference, but not on your pic.

    I also feel like that energy sphere is directly in front of her and should lit it accordingly. Now it's giving me the impression that the blue light is coming from the ground.
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