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    my playlistcover

    spend days on it
    it looks good to me, but im not sure
    would appreciate someone criticising it
    the more direct, the better

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    What's he drawing on?

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    Quote Originally Posted by JoeCowan View Post
    What's he drawing on?
    the idea was the paint dripping out of the pen and collectng on the ground

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    Visually - I don't get what is going on here. Be it the big purple-ish circle to the head-pen with a tail(?).

    The fingers look wonky holding the pen and could use some detail.

    The head's mouth could use a dash of detail too since the rest has had some work.

    There seems to be a lack of focus.. you know.. at the center where the visual cues direct the eye.
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    Quote Originally Posted by modi123 View Post
    Visually - I don't get what is going on here. Be it the big purple-ish circle to the head-pen with a tail(?).

    The fingers look wonky holding the pen and could use some detail.

    The head's mouth could use a dash of detail too since the rest has had some work.

    There seems to be a lack of focus.. you know.. at the center where the visual cues direct the eye.

    thank you very much. i tried to apply your suggestions as far as i could. did i fix it?
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    I guess that did something for the hand, but now I look at it and wonder how a giant 3d head is going to be resting against the hand while the body is on the thumb webbing.

    Though none of this helps me visually get what is going on.
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    Quote Originally Posted by modi123 View Post
    I guess that did something for the hand, but now I look at it and wonder how a giant 3d head is going to be resting against the hand while the body is on the thumb webbing.

    Though none of this helps me visually get what is going on.
    the 3d head isnt resting on the hand. i was trying to create depth by pushing the hand for example out of focus.
    thank you for critiqing im starting again

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