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    Hi! This is the work I'm still working on.
    Need your advice and criticism about composition, light and etc


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    The white dots on the figures are a distraction. They do not seem to have any bearing on the figures themselves despite being a light source? Also both dots appear to be lying flat on the page despite one of the figures standing at a 2/4 angle. The contrast of the central antennae object is out of synch with the objects that are around it.

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    Hi, I think you have some good drawing skills. With that, I don't feel like this composition is particularly interesting. It lacks a focus and the objects, while well drawn, don't intrigue me. Either make a distinct lighting, make the objects unusual or really large, or add some texture to a particular piece of rubble, or flesh out the people. Or put extra objects in there like feral dogs or empty cereal boxes, just something that makes it worth exploring.

    Aside from that the values are not quite there. The foreground shadows should be black. The foreground should have more contrast.

    Hope this helps.

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    Overall I agree with the crits so far!
    You have good lines and good sense of depth although I personally would push the centre right building back a little further, but that's just to my taste.
    I think its problem is the narrative I don't get what it is or what the two figures are there for.

    For example if it is derelict facility and they are exploring where is the equipment, ship, campsite or whatever to show the viewer what they are doing.

    If it is a live building then where are the office lights and vehicles, personnel and what sort of facility is it!

    For my money mate I would address the story behind it and show us what they are doing there, The image is not telling me anything.

    I hope that helps, best wishes
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