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    Scenery & color studies (it feels off)

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    It feels like something wrong with this & i don't know what
    Critique anyone?


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    I like it! I think this needs a little less silhouetted foreground: a crop from the bottom will do. Also, you could reduce details in the trees, the more you move to the back, in order to create a sense of depth. Add cast shadows for Alice and cat. About your design, there is not a lot to see, except for the beautiful colours of the sun, so for your next piece, try to make it more interesting to watch.
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    I also like it, my only personal issues are with the base of the mushroom Alice is on. It looks pretty cut-out with a chunk missing from the bottom contrasting uncomfortably with the sharp featureless angles of the stem.

    Also the base of the mushroom that is situated between the two trees on her left. Strange tangent going on there with background ridge. Causing the edge of the base to look like its floating off. If it is growing out at an angle, that needs to be more apparent.

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    So it's the tree & ridge that looks out of place, and Alice/cat also ruined the entire composition
    Allright thanks, i'll fix it later & upload it

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    i edited some stuffs here, for better or worse ¯\_(⊙_ʖ⊙)_/¯
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    I feel like cat and alice could be much closer to us up in the foreground, but I'm no expert at composition so feel free to take this with a grain of salt

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    The lighting is what is throwing me off. First - why is it so darn dark in the foreground? Are they in a mouth of a cave? If that much sunlight is coming from directly ahead I expect _something_ to be lit up.


    Second - the shadows from teh mushrooms look wonky. As if the sun is rolling in from the top right instead of bottom center.


    Same with Alice's right side being lit up and not her left.
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    I have a similar view to Modi123 I cant get a read on where the light is from? so I am not sure how to help.

    sorting the lighting is the place to start for me mate!
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    OK I have thrown some quick visualisations together in a 3d package to see what is happening with the light, bear in mind these are rough models and so the image isnt like yours but its near if you sort of squint!

    Ok the first is lit from above right

    the second is lit from the front

    the third is lit from behind and to the right

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    I hope this helps you out and points you in a useful direction.
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    The lighting is what is throwing me off. First - why is it so darn dark in the foreground? Are they in a mouth of a cave? If that much sunlight is coming from directly ahead I expect _something_ to be lit up.


    Second - the shadows from teh mushrooms look wonky. As if the sun is rolling in from the top right instead of bottom center.


    Same with Alice's right side being lit up and not her left

    at first i wanted the light direction on the right corner, but i ended it with messy & distorted composition instead, so i moved it to the center
    & yeah it's mouth of a cave, i wanted to add some vignette on the top, but it almost blocked the entire pic, darn it
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    damn dude, you made entire 3d of it, thanks a lot
    & that's more than enough to understand why it feels off :/

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    it's actually shrinking alice hahaha, no problem mate, i'll take any critiques
    right guys, i'm gonna pay attention for the next studies, thanks

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    Happy to help out!
    re start this one and this time "Plan it" literally do a top down plan of whats what, then thumbnail the crap out of it to get the image you want!
    One bit of advice that I got when I first came here is to "Do loads of Thumbnails" and explore the composition because your first idea is hardly ever the best one, sometimes it is but its rare! lol

    I would like to see you beat the crap out of this thing and get something good out of it!

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    haha yeah, i was greedy af "screw it, i'm gonna use color directly without proper composition & thumbnails" lesson learned ayyy

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