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    Feedback is appreciated

    I was pretty happy with this outcome but the response was rather, meh.
    So if people could help me figure out what I can improve it would be much appreciated

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    Good job on the coloring.. but things like shadows and highlight parts are inconsistent. As in if the light is coming from top right those leaves on the left side should be shaded..

    The subject is fairly blah as well. Smug fairy chick with a wool coat that goes up and under her boobs (which is odd, by the way).. Totally needs a pumpkin spice latte. haha!

    The background is okay, but again - pretty forgettable to me.
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    Thanks for the feedback, I notice the mistakes now.
    I totally didn't mean to make her look smug, I tried to aim for her to enjoy the sun, oh well.
    I try to add some more pumpkin spice in the future

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    Dude! You are the one from newgrounds ahah
    I'm the art station guy, nice to see you here too!

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    It's really nice! It certainly has appeal, but there are a few things that I think keep it from really working. One is the lighting and color as mentioned. If the piece is about a fairy basking in sunlight, the effect sunlight had better be represented really well! Right now the dark gradients on everything are hurting that. It looks like you are shading with black on the mushrooms.

    The other thing for me is depth. It kind of feels like there are only two trees in this entire forest and I'm looking at them. I wish the background were more convincing, meaning it implies there is more to this forest than just this mushroom. It's almost there, just not quite.

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    Quote Originally Posted by All View Post
    Dude! You are the one from newgrounds ahah
    I'm the art station guy, nice to see you here too!
    Hey there, yeah I drop by here every now and then. Small world huh

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    Quote Originally Posted by JoeCowan View Post
    It's really nice! It certainly has appeal, but there are a few things that I think keep it from really working. One is the lighting and color as mentioned. If the piece is about a fairy basking in sunlight, the effect sunlight had better be represented really well! Right now the dark gradients on everything are hurting that. It looks like you are shading with black on the mushrooms.

    The other thing for me is depth. It kind of feels like there are only two trees in this entire forest and I'm looking at them. I wish the background were more convincing, meaning it implies there is more to this forest than just this mushroom. It's almost there, just not quite.
    I see what you mean, it was a dark purple, but might as well be black.
    I did have some trees in the background but they got lost in the blur and overgrowth.
    Light and color are my weakest points right now. I am thinking of picking up James Gurneys book, people seem to recommend it a lot.
    Thanks for the feedback and encouragement.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Djoresh View Post
    I see what you mean, it was a dark purple, but might as well be black.
    Purple often works, but in this situation the light that would be coloring the shadows would be from the tree canopy and the sky (blue/green). You have to consider this for every situation. I also notice that when I pick the colors of the light and shadow side of things, the hue actually jumps from the local color in the light, all the way to blue in the shadow. The local color gets shifted in hue one way or another, but it shouldn't move that far.

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    I think the main problem is a weak composition. She's just sitting there in the middle, faily close to the top. It's all pretty static, with a few slanted lines
    here and there but mainly it's boring to look at.
    What if you moved the mushrooms around to frame her in an interesting way? what if you had a vertical format instead?
    I would experiment with different croppings. I would add more air above her. I would make sure the values in this piece emphasizes her. Right now the values look random.
    If your composition is strong, you can make most things look interesting.

    (Also, I think this belongs in the critique section rather than finished art. Any admins second that?)

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    Hey, It's a pretty nice painting.
    Has great mood, and colors overall are pretty appealing.
    As far as some technicalities, I feel people have already commented enough on that.

    But, my honest tip would be not to care too much about trying to draw things that people will like. In the end you will just lose yourself trying to become someone who you're not.
    If you really like the painting, that's the most important thing. Continue in that direction. Your voice will come out as you continue working and improving your technical skills (which are already pretty great).

    It is fairly easy to understand what kind of things will get you most attention... sexualized females, vivid colors and high contrast thumbnails, certain fan arts and such (of course you need certain skill level even with these subjects).
    I've definitely followed that path for a while as well. But I kept feeling fake about my art, and after a while it starts bugging you.

    Eh, just my two cents I guess.
    Be good and keep up the great work.
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