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    Need help with composition

    Hello, I am working on an personal illustration. Would like to here your opinion on how to improve it even more, i've been staring it for too long to be able to tell. Any suggestions are welcome!
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    First off, this is charming, it really is. The only thing I would say is that the way the light is coming in through the roof cracks would probably produce some really cool cast shadows, but that might change the look too much, something to think about. I like it, nice work.
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    What a wonderful illustration; I really enjoy the mood it accomplishes. You have a strong image in terms of design as well; the machine, boy and barn make up a really nice dark shape when I squint; you placed it nicely on top of a white background. I would say push the color palette even more by adding less detail in the shadows, and punching up the amount of detail in the lights. Also I recommend making the foreground of the tire and other object to the bottom left of the machine one dark shape. This will help push the depth of the image more.

    All in all push the warm color scheme in the image in the lights and allow the cracks of the barn roof to push the cools in the shadows. You are onto a really nice image here; for an example of what I am saying look at NC Wyeth's work as well as Howard Pyle. Good luck.

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    Hey YD,

    Comp wise I have a coupla suggestions. I did a 5 min PO. Here.

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    I was just seeing if the objects to the right were distracting or not. I guess if you trim the comp a little bit, more focus goes to the robot. Also the extreme light is actually sucking up the attention from the emotional appeal of the pic. I blocked it to see if it's working. Just a suggestion.

    Nice work. Love the robot.

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    Hi Ying, I think your painting is delightful! The composition is great, maybe you could replace that object in the foreground right corner, with something more interesting, and regarding the lighting, as the scene suggest the main light source comes from above and from behind the boy character, but the interior of the scene suggest that there is another light source that comes from our point of view. Maybe if you would regulate this it would give you an even greater contrast and would feel more natural. Keep up the good work

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    At this stage it is way too late to do major changes to composition.

    Next time, to avoid having such doubts, start the project with many quick composition thumbnails and pick the best one.

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    Quote Originally Posted by arenhaus View Post
    At this stage it is way too late to do major changes to composition.
    In particular because the original posting is one and a half year old
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    Quote Originally Posted by eezacque View Post
    In particular because the original posting is one and a half year old
    Heh, hoisted by a thread necromancer...

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    there should be some sort of warning when you are trying to post on necroed thread, or it should be closed at least critics sorry. if this goes bit offtopic

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