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    Critique for personal project - "Modern Maenad"

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    Hey guys, I did a personal piece, "Modern Maenad," that I'd love some critique on. It's not "for" anything, done purely out of fun and practice. Please ask questions if needed!

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    The painting's looking good! I think the blue spot in the top of the bg is kind of drawing my eye towards it (is it an opening in the rocks?). Also, I think the green around the blue might be contributing to that.

    If that is an opening and you can see the sky, the lighting on the figure doesn't really work with the environment, imo.

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    Hello dear,

    If you want to make it more realistic, the shape of the head is wrong, due the perspective you are using, unless the angled shape is caused by excess of hair.

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    Oh okay, duly noted! I can see it now that you've brought it up. I think I might be able to open up the sky, or raise up the rocks. For the lighting..I'll have to get creative. The thought process was that she was in hole, sun coming from above. but now I realize the background doesn't really support that. Thank you!

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    @paulo, realistic is not so important. believable is more what I care about. She is supposed to have excess hair, but that was more of a stylistic choice. If anyone else sees a similar issue, all ears.

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    Quote Originally Posted by karipaints View Post
    Oh okay, duly noted! I can see it now that you've brought it up. I think I might be able to open up the sky, or raise up the rocks. For the lighting..I'll have to get creative. The thought process was that she was in hole, sun coming from above. but now I realize the background doesn't really support that. Thank you!
    For changing the lighting, I think you can just darken the rocks with some bounce light from beneath, since the light source is coming from directly above on the figure. Right now, the light looks like it's coming in at an angle to light up that whole rock face.

    Here's a paint over with some adjustments to the rocks, lighting and skin tones. hope it helps!:

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    That is super helpful. Thanks!!

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    Her skull is deformed. Is that intentional?

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    was going for a poofy hairdo, can you draw the outline of the skull you'd like to see better? I can maybe manipulate the hair so it doesn't look deformed.

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    I like it overall even if some little details bother me like some jittering strokes and edges. No, the only thing that really annoys me (and it could be a matter of taste) is that everything seems oversaturated to my eyes. Add some greyish colors and every touch of saturated color you'll use will pop up with more strenght. Just my two cents though.

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    @Stef, thanks for your critique. I know what you mean by the jittering of the strokes and edges. I think next time I will force myself to work with bigger brushes to smaller brushes, and hopefully that will release some of that issue. As for over-saturation..yeah. I am addicted to too much color. Maybe I will try a version with some added grey's to play with your advice, though. Thank you!

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